Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, use correct tense and sentence structure, avoid repetition and filler sounds, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add when and with whom you rode it, using linking words like “and” or “so”.

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was in third grade. My parents bought it for me, and I rode it every afternoon with my cousins around our neighborhood. It helped me become more confident and independent.

제안: Give a clear opinion, use accurate vocabulary (e.g., popular, common, convenient), and support your idea with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words such as “because”, “for example”, or “so” to connect ideas, and avoid hesitations or filler phrases.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient and inexpensive. For example, many students and workers ride bicycles to school or the market, which saves money and avoids traffic. As a result, cycling is a common mode of transport in both cities and rural areas.

× Yes I have when I was grade grade three he he bought me a bike.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was in third grade; he bought me a bike.

The student mixes present perfect 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was...'; use simple past 'had' and 'bought' for completed actions in the past. Also add 'in' before 'third grade' and remove repeated words. Suggestion: use simple past for past events and keep time expressions consistent (e.g., 'I had one when I was in third grade').

× Then I go in in the in *** **** and raised in my with my cousin and friends.

✓ Then I went to the [place] and stayed with my cousins and friends.

The sentence has incorrect verb tense ('go' should be past 'went'), repeated prepositions, wrong verb 'raised' (should be 'stayed' or 'was raised' depending on meaning), and unclear word order. Use simple past for past events and place words in correct order: subject + past verb + place + accompaniment. Replace unclear parts with the correct noun (here shown as [place]).

× Yes, it's so popular because it's so many people that will spike in here because bike is So what do you call this? It it help? It helps you to go anywhere and go school like yes.

✓ Yes, they are very popular because many people ride bikes here. Bikes are helpful; they help you go anywhere and get to school.

Multiple problems: subject-verb agreement ('it's' referring to plural 'bikes' should be 'they are'), incorrect phrase 'it's so many people' should be 'many people', wrong verb 'spike' likely 'ride', inconsistent tense and awkward questions. Also 'bike is So what do you call this? It it help?' is ungrammatical. Use plural subjects with plural verbs, choose correct verbs (ride), and use clear sentence structure: reason + supporting sentence. Suggestion: simplify to 'Bikes are popular because many people ride them; they help you travel and go to school.'