Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You should answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and specific detail. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Use simple past tense for childhood and avoid repetition. For coherence, add one or two supporting details using linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “and”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels because I learned to ride slowly. I used to cycle to my friend’s house every afternoon, and it helped me become more confident and active.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence (present tense) and then give specific reasons or comparisons. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., “popular”, “common”, “less common”) and correct phrases for time references (e.g., “when I was a child”). Use linking words such as “however”, “but”, or “although” to contrast past and present. Keep answers concise and grammatical.

예시: I think bikes are less popular now than they used to be. However, when I was a child, they were very common because families relied on bikes for short trips and children enjoyed them as toys. Nowadays, more people prefer cars and public transit, so fewer children learn to ride regularly.

× Yeah, of course when when I watch chill, I'm have a many bites.

✓ Yeah, of course. When I was a child, I had a lot of bikes.

Multiple errors: 'watch chill' is incorrect word choice and likely meant 'was a child' (present tense 'watch' wrong) — this is a present tense issue (ID 6) and past tense issue (ID 5). 'I'm have' mixes present continuous with base verb and is ungrammatical — subject-verb agreement/present tense problem (ID 27 and 6). 'a many bites' uses incorrect quantifier and wrong noun form: 'many' with a count noun needs no 'a' and 'bites' is wrong word; should be 'a lot of bikes' or 'many bikes' — quantifier and singular/plural issue (ID 14 and 1). Correction changes to past tense 'was' and 'had' to match the time frame of childhood. Suggestion: use past tense for past events, use correct vocabulary ('child' not 'chill'), ensure subject and verb agree ('I had'), and use proper quantifiers ('a lot of bikes' or 'many bikes').

× Uh, in my opinion, I think nowadays it's not that bleak, not that popular, but when while I'm shell, I think it's really popular because every child want to have a bike.

✓ Uh, in my opinion, I think nowadays they're not that popular, but when I was a child, I think they were really popular because every child wanted to have a bike.

Errors include wrong adjective 'bleak' for 'popular' (word choice), incorrect contraction 'it's' referring to bikes (singular 'it' vs plural 'they') — subject-verb agreement (ID 27) and number issue (ID 1). 'when while I'm shell' is ungrammatical; should be 'when I was a child' using past tense (ID 5). 'every child want' has incorrect verb form; with singular subject 'every child' use third person singular past 'wanted' (ID 2 and 5). Overall, use plural pronouns 'they' for 'bikes' in general statements, maintain consistent tense (present for current state: 'are not', past for childhood: 'were'), and use correct verb agreement ('every child wanted').