Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, correct grammar, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and under five sentences. For example, begin with “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.” Then describe it concisely (color, type) and add a brief memory or reason why you loved it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small, lightweight bike painted yellow and red, with a little bell on the handlebar. I loved it because I could ride it to my friend’s house and felt independent. Because of that, I spent most afternoons practicing in the park.

제안: State your opinion clearly, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words to support it. Use more precise language (e.g., ‘less common’), mention local factors (infrastructure, culture) and compare briefly. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Although some people cycle for leisure, most people prefer cars because we lack safe bike lanes and our weather can be hot. For example, cities like Amsterdam are more bicycle-friendly with extensive cycling infrastructure, so cycling is much more common there.

× That it was a bike of bike in yellow and red color.

✓ It was a yellow-and-red bike.

Original sentence has redundant words and incorrect word order ('That it was a bike of bike in yellow and red color'). This is a sentence structure error: remove the unnecessary 'That' and duplicate 'bike', use correct adjective order and compound adjective with hyphenation or linking words. Suggestion: start with 'It was' then use adjectives before the noun: 'It was a yellow-and-red bike.'

× I really love it.

✓ I really loved it.

The question asks about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The verb 'love' should match past time, so use past tense 'loved'. This is a tense mismatch (present tense issue). Suggestion: use past tense to describe past feelings: 'I really loved it.'

× I think these bikes are not as popular as in other countries, like maybe in Amsterdam and USA.

✓ I think bikes are not as popular here as they are in other places, such as Amsterdam and the USA.

Problems: incorrect or missing prepositions and demonstratives ('as popular as in other countries' is awkward without specifying reference), unnecessary plural 'these' when speaking generally, and missing article 'the' before 'USA'. This fits incorrect use of prepositions and articles. Suggestion: use 'here' to indicate the student's country, compare with 'in other places' or 'in the USA', and include 'the' before 'USA'. Also make the comparison explicit: 'not as popular here as they are in...'