Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and unclear statements, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (tense and articles) and remove contradictions (e.g., saying you liked to ride but it was illegal). Use linking words to organise your answer.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I wanted one because I enjoyed watching other children ride, but my parents didn’t buy one. Also, local laws restricted young children from riding on public roads, so I never had the chance to learn.

제안: Open with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., commuters, affordable transport) and avoid vague generalisations. Include a linking word to connect reasons and a brief example or comparison.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many middle-class families find motorcycles and scooters much more affordable than cars. Secondly, bikes are more convenient for commuting in crowded cities because they are easier to park and use on narrow streets.

× Well, in my childhood I didn't have any bike and I like to ride bike in my childhood but unfortunately my parents didn't buy for me 'cause I I was a child and it's illegal in our country to ride a bike in childhood in limited age.

✓ Well, in my childhood I didn't have a bike and I liked to ride a bike when I was young, but unfortunately my parents didn't buy one for me because I was a child and it was illegal in our country for children of a certain age to ride a bike.

Multiple past-tense verbs are required to describe past situations. The original mixes present tense 'I like' with past context; use 'liked'. Use 'didn't have a bike' (not 'any bike') for a single item. Use 'buy one for me' instead of 'buy for me'. Use 'because' instead of 'cause' for formal writing. Clarify legality with 'it was illegal...for children of a certain age'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense when describing past experiences and choose correct object words (a bike/one).

× Well, in my opinion the bikes are very much popular in my country because here the people come from middle class family and they can't afford cars, so they prefer riding bikes and it is better than cars here.

✓ Well, in my opinion bikes are very popular in my country because many people come from middle-class families and they can't afford cars, so they prefer riding bikes, which are more practical than cars here.

Do not use 'the' before a general plural noun 'bikes' when speaking generally. Use 'many people' and plural 'families' with the adjective 'middle-class'. 'Very much popular' is ungrammatical; say 'very popular' or 'popular'. Use comparative phrasing 'more practical than cars' rather than 'better than cars here'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary definite articles and use correct adjective-noun agreement (middle-class families), and use natural comparative expressions.