Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조를 더 자연스럽게 고치고 불필요한 중복과 망설임을 줄이세요. 예를 들어 주제 문장으로 간단히 시작한 뒤 짧은 추가 정보(언제, 누구에게서, 어떤 종류의 자전거였는지)를 연결어로 덧붙이는 연습을 하세요. 또한 'umm'과 같은 망설임을 줄이고 관사와 전치사 사용(예: "a bike", "from a big market")을 정확히 하세요.

예시: Yes, I did. I got a bike when I was 12 — my mother bought it for me from a large market in my town, and I rode it to visit my friends every weekend.

제안: 의견을 명확한 주제 문장으로 시작하고 이유와 예시를 체계적으로 제시하세요. 연결어(예: 'because', 'for example', 'also')를 사용해 논리적으로 연결하고 망설임 표현을 제거하세요. 구체적인 세부사항(자전거 도로의 상태, 대여 서비스의 범위 등)을 한두 가지 포함하면 점수가 오릅니다.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are fairly popular in my country because many cities have dedicated bike lanes and there is a public bike-sharing system. For example, in my city you can rent a bike from several docking stations, which makes cycling a convenient option for short trips.

× As I did, I had a bike when I was 12 years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was 12 years old.

The original sentence contains an unnecessary and incorrect phrase 'As I did' which creates a sentence structure error. Remove the phrase and begin with a simple affirmative 'Yes' or directly state 'I had a bike when I was 12 years old.' This fits the past tense question and makes the response natural.

× My mom bought that from, umm, big market in my town.

✓ My mom bought it from a big market in my town.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'big market' and uses the demonstrative 'that' incorrectly to refer to the bike; use 'it.' Also remove the filler 'umm' for clarity. Use 'a big market' to indicate one unspecified market in the town.

× I think kinda popular UMM there is road for bike and also we have public lands bike service so people can use UMM.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular. We have bike lanes and a public bike-sharing service that people can use.

The original has multiple issues: informal filler words ('kinda', 'UMM'), missing subject-verb structure, incorrect noun phrases ('road for bike' should be 'bike lanes'), and awkward phrasing ('public lands bike service'). Rephrase into two clear sentences: state opinion in present tense ('bikes are quite popular') and describe infrastructure with correct terms ('bike lanes', 'public bike-sharing service'). Avoid fillers and ensure subject-verb agreement.