Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove filler words (uh), correct the age phrase, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. It was a birthday gift from my father when I was four, and I learned to ride it quickly. For example, I practiced every afternoon in the park until I could ride without help.

제안: Avoid repetition and informal contractions. Give a clear topic sentence, use a linking word to introduce reasons, and provide a specific example or consequence. Use correct grammar (e.g., "they help" not "it's helps").

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, many people use them to commute to work and school, and as a result, they help reduce traffic congestion and air pollution.

× Yes I did, and I used to ride my bike very well. Uh, it was my father's, uh, gift for my, uh, birthday of my, uh, four year old.

✓ Yes I did, and I used to ride my bike very well. It was my father's gift for my fourth birthday.

The original contains awkward phrasing 'birthday of my, uh, four year old' which is ungrammatical. The correct expression is 'my fourth birthday.' Also 'Uh' and filler words should be removed for clarity. 'It was' is an appropriate past-tense reference to a single event, fitting the question about childhood. Suggestion: use 'my fourth birthday' and avoid filler words for clearer speech.

× Yes, of course, 'cause bikes are so popular and helpful because they can help people to commute every day and it's also helps to reduce the air pollution.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are very popular and helpful because they help people commute every day, and they also help reduce air pollution.

There are subject-verb agreement issues: 'they can help people to commute' is acceptable but wordy; more natural is 'they help people commute.' The phrase 'it's also helps' is incorrect because 'it' (singular) does not agree with 'helps' in this context; the intended subject is plural 'they.' Also 'the air pollution' should be 'air pollution' (no definite article). Suggestions: match plural subject 'they' with plural verb 'help,' remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help,' and drop 'the' before 'air pollution' for idiomatic English.