Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatically correct with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use past tense consistently and a precise word for the vehicle (bike or bicycle). For example, say you didn’t have a bike, explain why briefly, then add one memorable detail.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. However, I did have a small balance bike for a short time, and I remember practicing in our yard until I could ride on my own.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitation and repeated phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore) to organize your answer. Mention specific user groups or typical journeys to make your point concrete.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because traffic is heavy in cities, so many commuters use bicycles to save time and avoid congestion. For example, office workers and students often cycle to work or university, especially for short trips of a few kilometers.

× No, I have no bike when I was child because, uh, I'm, I'm too younger, so my parents did not give my parents was not, uh, give me this type of bites. But yes, I remember I also had a a cycle.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was too young, so my parents did not give me one. But yes, I remember I also had a cycle.

This sentence contains multiple tense and structure errors. The main issue is using present tense 'have' with the past time marker 'when I was a child' (Present tense issue ID 6). Also 'I'm too younger' is incorrect; use past adjective 'was too young'. Redundant and incorrect phrases like 'my parents did not give my parents was not give me this type of bites' should be simplified to 'my parents did not give me one'. Suggestions: use past simple 'did not have' for past situations, use 'was' with age descriptions, and replace unclear words ('bites') with 'bike' or 'one'. Keep sentences concise to avoid repetition.

× No, I have no bike when I was child because, uh, I'm, I'm too younger, so my parents did not give my parents was not, uh, give me this type of bites. But yes, I remember I also had a a cycle.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was too young, so my parents did not give me one. But yes, I remember I also had a cycle.

This sentence misuses and omits articles (Article errors ID 22). 'When I was child' should be 'when I was a child'. 'A a cycle' has a duplicated article and should be 'a cycle'. Suggestions: ensure singular countable nouns are preceded by 'a' or 'the' as appropriate and remove duplicate articles.

× So this, this is the main reason, uh, everyone has, uh, have a, everyone have a bikes for going to their jobs, umm, and interviews.

✓ So this is the main reason: everyone has a bike for going to their jobs and interviews.

The student mixes singular and plural forms (Singular and plural issue ID 1). 'Everyone have a bikes' is incorrect because 'everyone' is singular and should take 'has' and the noun should be singular 'a bike'. Suggestions: match singular subjects with singular verbs and nouns; use 'everyone has a bike'.

× So this, this is the main reason, uh, everyone has, uh, have a, everyone have a bikes for going to their jobs, umm, and interviews.

✓ So this is the main reason: everyone has a bike for going to their jobs and interviews.

There is a subject-verb agreement problem where 'everyone' (third person singular) is paired with 'have' instead of 'has' (Third person singular issue ID 2 / Subject-verb agreement ID 27). Use 'everyone has' because 'everyone' is grammatically singular. Suggestion: use 'has' with 'everyone'.

× Yes, in my country, bikes are very popular because, uh, I am, I'm living in a city area, so, uh, everyone has a, has a busy schedule.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are very popular because I live in a city area, so everyone has a busy schedule.

Using 'I am living' is less natural for habitual or general situations; the simple present 'I live' is preferred (Present tense issue ID 6). Also remove redundant 'has a, has a'. Suggestions: use simple present for routines and general facts: 'I live' and 'everyone has a busy schedule'.