Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise, and more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect plural/singular forms (e.g., 'a lot of bike' should be 'a bike' or 'several bikes'). Use past tense consistently for childhood experiences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child and often rode it home from school with my best friend. We would race each other in the afternoons, which made the short trip very fun and helped me become more confident on the road.

제안: Clarify your ideas and use precise vocabulary. Begin with a direct opinion, then give clear reasons and examples. Use correct articles and plural forms (e.g., 'in the public parks' or 'in parks') and choose verbs that fit the context (e.g., 'park' or 'leave' rather than 'hide'). Avoid vague phrases like 'release our streets from their life'.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for short trips and exercise, and you can often see bicycles parked in public parks and outside schools. This is partly because cycling is cheap and convenient, so it helps reduce traffic congestion in busy areas.

× Absolutely, I have a lot of bike when I was a child because at that time I also take a bike with my best friend when we finished our class.

✓ Absolutely, I had a lot of bikes when I was a child because at that time I also took a bike with my best friend when we finished our class.

The sentence has pluralization, tense, and verb form errors. 'a lot of bike' is incorrect: with 'a lot of' the noun should be plural, so use 'a lot of bikes' (Grammar problem type 1). Also the clause refers to childhood (past), so the verb 'have' should be in the past 'had' (past tense error, type 5) and 'take' should be past 'took' (type 5). To improve: match number by using plural nouns after quantifiers ('a lot of bikes') and keep consistent past tense for actions that occurred in the past ('had', 'took').

× I would say absolutely, because you know, on those public park almost everybody hides their bike.

✓ I would say absolutely, because you know, in those public parks almost everybody keeps their bike.

The sentence has incorrect preposition and noun number and an inappropriate verb tense/form. 'on those public park' should be 'in those public parks' (preposition and singular/plural issue, types 11 and 1). 'hides their bike' is unnatural here: 'keep/park their bikes' fits better; also plural 'bikes' matches 'everybody' possession (singular/plural consideration) and present simple 'keeps' or plural noun with 'keep' after 'everybody' is acceptable in meaning—use 'keep their bike' or better 'keep their bikes'. To improve: use correct prepositions for location (in parks) and pluralize nouns when referring to multiple places ('parks') and multiple items ('bikes').

× I think it's a good way to release our streets from their life or working and studying.

✓ I think it's a good way to free our streets from traffic caused by commuting to work and school.

The original phrase uses incorrect verbs and prepositions: 'release our streets from their life or working and studying' is ungrammatical. 'Release X from Y' is possible but the intended meaning is to remove people or traffic from the streets, so use 'free our streets from traffic caused by commuting to work and school.' This fixes preposition and word choice errors (type 11) and clarifies meaning. To improve: choose accurate nouns (traffic, commuting) and prepositional phrases ('from traffic', 'caused by') to convey the idea correctly.