Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Shorten and structure the answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, and word forms) and avoid redundancy. For example, use past simple consistently (bought, rode) and replace vague phrases like “approximately” with “around.” Also clarify the accident: where and what happened, and the result.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that my dad bought me when I was around six or seven. I remember once I rode it onto a busy path and fell, but my dad helped me up and treated my scrapes.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons linked by connectors. Fix grammar and word choice: use plural where needed (separate lanes), avoid awkward phrases like “every month and every time of the year” — say “throughout the year.” Add an example or brief statistic if possible.

예시: Absolutely — bikes are very popular in my country. One reason is that many cities have dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling safer; additionally, people cycle year-round because the climate is mild. For example, I see commuters riding to work every morning on those lanes.

× Yes I did, I had a red bicycle with red wheels and my dad bought me when I was approximately 6 or 7 years old and I remember 1 accident when I accidentally ride it onto the way and my dad kept me.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle with red wheels that my dad bought me when I was approximately six or seven years old, and I remember one accident when I accidentally rode it onto the road and my dad caught me.

Multiple past-tense verbs should be used consistently because the events occurred in the past. 'Bought' is correct for purchase, but 'ride' should be in the past form 'rode'. Use 'one' instead of the numeral '1' in formal writing. Replace 'onto the way' with the correct noun 'the road'. Add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Keep past events in past tense (e.g., I rode), spell out small numbers in writing, and use appropriate nouns ('road') and punctuation to improve readability.

× Absolutely. I would say that bikes are one of the most popular transport nowadays in my country because there is a special separate lines for bikes and people use it every day, every month and every time of the year.

✓ Absolutely. I would say that bikes are one of the most popular forms of transport nowadays in my country because there are special separate lanes for bikes and people use them every day, every month, and throughout the year.

Article and count noun agreement errors: 'transport' should be preceded by a qualifier and use 'forms of transport' to be natural. 'There is a special separate lines' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'lines' and uses 'special separate' awkwardly; use plural verb 'are' and 'lanes' as the correct noun for bike paths. Pronoun agreement: 'people use it' is wrong because 'lanes' is plural—use 'them'. 'Every time of the year' is unnatural; 'throughout the year' is idiomatic. Suggestion: Match singular/plural for 'there is/are' and nouns, use the correct noun 'lanes', ensure pronouns agree in number, and prefer idiomatic phrases like 'throughout the year'.