Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp cơ bản, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn; tránh lặp từ và câu quá dài. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp thì và trật tự từ (“my mother bought me my first small bike”), (2) dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn trả lời trực tiếp rồi thêm 1–2 câu hỗ trợ, (3) sửa phát âm từ gây hiểu nhầm (“bite” → “bought”) và dùng tính từ đúng (“it was very exciting”), (4) giới hạn câu tới tối đa 4-5 câu, tránh thừa từ như “for me” nhiều lần.

예시: Yes, I did. My mother bought me my first small bike when I was about four. I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon, which made me feel very excited because I could explore more independently.

제안: Cải thiện tính rõ ràng và chính xác của ý, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và liên từ để nối ý. Cụ thể: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề, (2) sửa ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ (“cheap convenience” → “cheap and convenient”, “store chief” có thể là “shopkeepers” hoặc “vendors”), (3) dùng liên từ như "also" hoặc "because" hợp lý, (4) tránh dịch theo cấu trúc tiếng Việt như “refer use them to communicate” và thay bằng cụm đúng như “use them to get around”.

예시: Yes, I do. Bikes are very common in Vietnam because they are cheap and convenient, especially for shopkeepers and students. They are also more environmentally friendly than cars, so many people prefer to use them to get around in crowded cities.

× I remember being three to five years old, my mother bite for me a first small bike and I used it to ride around my neighborhood.

✓ I remember that when I was three to five years old, my mother bought me my first small bike and I used it to ride around my neighborhood.

The verb 'bite' is incorrect; the past tense of 'buy' is 'bought'. Also add 'that when I was' to make the time clause clear and change 'for me a first' to natural English 'bought me my first'. Suggestion: use the past simple for completed actions in the past (bought, used) and arrange words in the natural English order: subject + verb + object.

× I felt it's very excited for me.

✓ I felt very excited.

'It's very excited for me' is incorrect because 'excited' is an adjective describing the speaker's feeling and should be used with 'I felt' followed by the adjective: 'I felt very excited.' Remove 'it's' and 'for me' which are unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'feel/ felt + adjective' to describe emotions.

× using bike is very common in Vietnam because they are cheap convenience for the store chief.

✓ Using bikes is very common in Vietnam because they are cheap and convenient for shopkeepers.

Several issues: 'Using bike' should be plural 'Using bikes' or 'Bike use'. 'They' refers to bikes, so plural is needed. 'cheap convenience' is ungrammatical; use 'cheap and convenient'. 'store chief' is not natural; use 'shopkeepers' or 'store owners'. Suggestion: ensure noun-pronoun number agreement and use appropriate collocations (cheap and convenient, shopkeepers).

× They are also more environmentally friendly than cars, so many people refer use them to communicate.

✓ They are also more environmentally friendly than cars, so many people use them to get around.

The phrase 'refer use them to communicate' is incorrect. Likely intended meaning is 'use them to get around' (travel). Use the verb 'use' with the object 'them' and an appropriate complement: 'to get around' or 'to travel.' Suggestion: choose correct verbs and prepositional phrases for intended meaning; 'get around' is commonly used for moving around locally.