Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetitions and filler words, and use correct verb forms and pronouns. For example, replace “They had my” and repeated hesitations with a single clear phrase, and link events with words like “then” or “after that.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought it for my birthday and taught me to ride it. At first I kept falling, but after a few lessons I learned to ride confidently.

제안: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons and use linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “they are” or “they’re” instead of “he's”) and avoid vague phrases like “maybe” when you can be confident. Provide one or two concrete examples (commuting, exercise) and use a linking word such as “because” or “for example.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities, because many people use them to commute to work or school. For example, in urban areas bike lanes make cycling a fast and healthy option for short trips.

× They had my, my dad bought me for a gift and it's my birthday gift and uh, that I, he teach, he taught me how to ride a bike and I failed.

✓ It was my dad who bought it for me as a birthday gift, and he taught me how to ride a bike, but I failed at first.

Multiple past tense and sequence errors: 'They had my' is unclear and incorrect; use past simple 'it was' and 'bought'. 'He teach' mixes present with past; correct to past simple 'he taught'. Use 'at first' to indicate initial failure. Ensure consistent past tense for completed actions. Suggestion: Keep actions in the past simple when describing past events in sequence (bought, taught, failed).

× After I failed, I suddenly just learned how to bike.

✓ After I failed, I eventually learned how to ride a bike.

The adverb 'suddenly' clashes with the meaning of learning, which is gradual; 'eventually' fits better. Also use 'ride a bike' rather than 'bike' as a verb in this context; both are acceptable but 'ride a bike' is more natural. Suggestion: Choose adverbs that match the action's nature and use natural verb phrases ('learned to ride a bike' or 'learned how to ride a bike').

× I think yes, maybe he's popular it maybe it's more popular in the city than the town because some people will use it to commute to the school or workplace and it's also a good, uh, exercise or fitness weight.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular; they are probably more popular in cities than in towns because some people use them to commute to school or to work, and they are also good exercise.

Pronoun and reference errors: 'he's popular it' is meaningless; replace with plural noun 'bicycles' and pronoun 'they'. 'the school' is unnecessary; use 'school' or 'work' without 'the'. 'fitness weight' is incorrect collocation; use 'good exercise'. Ensure subject-pronoun agreement (bicycles -> they) and clear noun references. Suggestion: Use consistent noun or pronoun references and common collocations ('good exercise', 'commute to school' or 'commute to work').

× maybe it's more popular in the city than the town

✓ maybe it's more popular in cities than in towns

Compare general places using plural nouns and preposition consistency: use 'in cities' and 'in towns' rather than 'in the city' and 'the town' when making general statements. Suggestion: Use plural forms when speaking generally about categories (cities, towns) and repeat the preposition for clarity ('in cities than in towns').

× some people will use it to commute to the school or workplace and it's also a good, uh, exercise or fitness weight.

✓ some people use it to commute to school or to work, and it's also good exercise.

Avoid unnecessary future 'will' when stating habitual facts; use present simple 'use'. Remove 'the' before 'school' when speaking generally. 'Fitness weight' is incorrect: replace with 'good exercise'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and correct collocations ('good exercise').