Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., "umm"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and vary vocabulary slightly to sound natural (e.g., "I could ride to school independently").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It allowed me to ride to school independently, so I didn’t have to wait for my parents every morning.

제안: Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences and use linking words naturally (e.g., "because," "also"). Be specific with examples or brief comparisons (for instance, mention bike lanes or bike-sharing schemes). Avoid wordy phrases like "to the atmosphere" — say "greenhouse gases" or "carbon emissions."

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people want a healthier lifestyle. For example, cities have built more bike lanes and there are several bike-sharing schemes, which also help reduce carbon emissions.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was younger because in that way I can, umm, go to school by myself and I don't need to rely on my parents by doing so.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was younger because that way I could go to school by myself and I didn't need to rely on my parents.

The sentence mixes past tense ('did have', 'when I was younger') with present tense modal 'can' and present negative 'don't need', causing a tense inconsistency. According to the context (past habit), modal verbs and verbs should be in the past: use 'could' instead of 'can' and 'didn't need' instead of 'don't need'. Also 'in that way' is wordy; 'that way' is more natural. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past tense when referring to past situations (e.g., 'I could', 'I didn't').

× Yes, I think cycling is something that's very prevalent within our country because nowadays people prefer a healthier lifestyle and cycling is not only good for our personal health but also it reduces carbon emission to the atmosphere.

✓ Yes, I think cycling is very prevalent in our country because nowadays people prefer a healthier lifestyle, and cycling is not only good for our personal health but also reduces carbon emissions.

Multiple small issues: 'prevalent within our country' is acceptable but 'prevalent in our country' is more natural (preposition choice). 'Something that's' is unnecessary wordiness. 'It reduces carbon emission to the atmosphere' has article and count issues and awkward phrasing: use plural 'carbon emissions' and omit 'to the atmosphere' because emissions already imply release; 'reduces carbon emissions' is concise. Also remove redundant 'it' before 'reduces' and add a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. Suggestion: simplify phrasing, choose natural prepositions ('in'), use plural 'emissions', and maintain clear clause connection.