Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cách cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và filler (ví dụ: “I did”, “when I was”), sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Nên dùng liên từ thích hợp để nối ý (ví dụ: “and”, “so”, “after that”) và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như động từ đi với “bike” (use “ride a bike” hoặc “go cycling”). Giữ độ dài câu trong giới hạn 3–4 câu, tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child, and I often rode it with my friends after school. We usually cycled around the neighborhood and sometimes raced each other for fun. Those afternoons helped me stay active and made great memories.

제안: Cách cải thiện: Tránh dùng nhiều filler (“umm”). Trả lời trực tiếp, rồi giải thích rõ ràng với lý do cụ thể và ví dụ minh họa. Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g., “affordable”, “common”, “commuting”) và liên từ để nối ý. Câu trả lời nên có 2–3 câu: một câu chủ đề + 1 câu chi tiết cụ thể.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. Many people use bicycles to commute to work or school, especially in busy cities where traffic is heavy. For example, I often see people riding bikes along dedicated lanes during the morning rush hour.

× I did have a bike when I was, when I was a child and I often bike ride a bike with my friends, uh, after school in the, even in the afternoon.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a child and I often rode my bike with my friends after school or in the afternoon.

The phrase 'bike ride a bike' is ungrammatical. Use the correct verb form: 'ride' paired with past tense 'rode' because the time reference is past ('when I was a child', 'often' in that period). Also remove redundancy 'bike' twice and unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: use 'rode my bike' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, umm, bikes are popular in my country because umm, the price is cheap and. And I see that people often bike in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because they are cheap, and I see that people often ride bikes in my country.

Use consistent present tense structures and correct verbs: 'the price is cheap' is vague and incorrect reference; use plural subject 'they' to refer to bikes (subject-pronoun agreement). Replace 'bike' as verb with 'ride bikes' or 'ride bicycles' for natural English. Remove sentence fragment 'and.' Suggestion: use 'they are cheap' and 'people often ride bikes.'