Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid stating obvious facts (like bikes having two wheels). Also correct minor tense/number agreement (e.g., “two-wheelers are popular”) and reduce repetition.

예시: Yes — I did. I loved my blue bicycle when I was a child because I could ride it to visit friends and explore my neighborhood. For example, my father gave me a small horn on my tenth birthday, which made the rides feel special and helped me announce myself on busy streets.

제안: Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give two specific, coherent reasons linked with conjunctions or linking phrases. Use more natural vocabulary (e.g., “two-wheelers” or “motorbikes”) and avoid repetition. Improve grammar: remove redundant phrases and use correct articles and word order.

예시: Yes, definitely. Two-wheelers are extremely common in India because they are much cheaper than cars and are easier to park in crowded cities. For instance, many office commuters prefer motorbikes for quick trips across town, and small families buy scooters for daily errands.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was so fun to ride a bike especially in my home country.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was so much fun to ride, especially in my home country.

The phrase 'so fun' is informal and 'so much fun' is more natural in past-tense narrative. Also avoid repeating 'a bike' twice; remove redundancy and add a comma before 'especially'. Use past tense consistently for childhood experience. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× 2 Wheelers are so famous.

✓ Two-wheelers are very popular.

'2 Wheelers' mixes numeral and capitalization; write 'Two-wheelers' and use hyphen for the compound noun. 'Famous' is not appropriate for objects; 'popular' is correct. Also use 'very' instead of 'so' for neutral tone. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× I had a bike which was blue in color.

✓ I had a bike that was blue in color.

Use 'that' rather than 'which' in restrictive clauses in informal speech; 'which' is acceptable but can be less natural here. This is primarily style; plural/singular is fine but change improves accuracy. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× It has two wheels, the front and the rear.

✓ It had two wheels: a front and a rear one.

The surrounding sentences are in past tense ('I had a bike'), so the description should also use past tense 'had'. Also rephrase to 'a front and a rear one' for clarity. Use colon or comma appropriately. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× It had a special horn that was gifted by my father on my birthday.

✓ It had a special horn that my father gave me for my birthday.

'Was gifted by' is a passive construction; 'my father gave me' is more natural and direct in past narrative. Also 'on my birthday' -> 'for my birthday' is the usual collocation. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yes, bikes are very common in my country like India.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common in my country, like in India.

The phrase 'in my country like India' is awkward. If the speaker means their country (India), say 'in my country' or 'in India' or 'in my country, like in India' for comparison. Add a comma and restructure for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Everyone who cannot, anyone who cannot afford a car can buy a 2 Wheeler because it's less expensive and in budget and that can be used for daily commute and to go for work.

✓ Anyone who cannot afford a car can buy a two-wheeler because it is less expensive and within budget, and it can be used for daily commutes and getting to work.

The original sentence is redundant and ungrammatical: 'Everyone who cannot, anyone who cannot' repeats subjects. Replace with 'Anyone who cannot afford a car'. Use 'two-wheeler' with hyphen and words not numerals. Use 'less expensive' and 'within budget' (not 'in budget'). Use plural 'daily commutes' and 'getting to work' for natural phrasing. Keep verb tenses consistent and split clauses with commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]} (END)