Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on answering the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two coherent supporting details. Use correct tense and simple sentence structures, avoid unrelated information (like a bag) unless it links to the bike. Include linking words (for example, “because”, “so”, “and”) to connect ideas. Work on basic grammar (past tense, articles, word order) and pronunciation of key verbs (ride, receive, give).

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My mother gave it to me as a birthday present, and I rode it for hours around the neighborhood. Because I practiced often, I became confident riding to my friends’ houses.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, “because”, “for example”, “so”) and correct noun forms and articles (e.g., “shared bikes”, “they are green”). Keep sentences concise and check word choice (use “environmentally friendly” instead of just “green”).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because shared bike services are widespread. For example, people can scan a QR code to unlock a shared bike and ride it across the city, which is convenient and environmentally friendly.

× Yes, why was the child my mom gave me a bag for as a gift?

✓ Yes. When I was a child my mom gave me a bag as a gift.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words ('why', 'for', duplicate subject). This is a sentence structure error: the time clause 'When I was a child' should start the sentence or follow the subject; 'my mom gave me a bag as a gift' is the correct clause. Suggestion: place the time phrase correctly and remove unnecessary words.

× I'm so happy in my birthday is so surprise this by here.

✓ I was so happy; my birthday was a big surprise.

The student mixes tenses and uses incorrect word order ('in my birthday', 'is so surprise', 'this by here'). The context asks about the past, so use past tense 'was'. Also use correct noun/adjective order: 'a big surprise' or 'very surprised'. Suggestion: use past tense and common collocations ('was a surprise', 'I was very happy').

× I ride a long time and I buy bike go anywhere.

✓ I rode it for a long time and I could ride the bike to go anywhere.

Multiple errors: verb tense should be past ('rode' not 'ride'); 'buy bike' is incorrect meaning — likely 'bought a bike' if they purchased it, or 'could ride the bike to go anywhere' to express ability. The original lacks auxiliary/modal and proper connectors. This fits present participle/past tense issues. Suggestion: choose correct past tense verbs ('rode', 'bought') and include auxiliaries or modals ('could') for ability.

× Yeah, you know, the bike is so public and you know in China have so many share bike you can use scan the QR code ready bike go to anywhere.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common. In China there are many shared bikes you can use by scanning a QR code to unlock a bike and go anywhere.

Problems include article usage and countability ('the bike' vs 'bikes'), missing subject-verb agreement ('in China there are'), and incorrect noun forms ('share bike' → 'shared bikes'). Also phrasing for actions: 'scan the QR code to unlock a bike'. Suggestion: use plural 'bikes' for general statements, include 'there are' for existence, and proper verb phrases ('scanning a QR code to unlock').

× So it's so convenient and the green.

✓ So it's very convenient and environmentally friendly.

'the green' is not a correct adjective here. Use 'environmentally friendly' or 'good for the environment' to describe ecological benefits. Also use 'very' rather than repeated 'so' for better style. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives for environmental descriptions and correct collocations.