Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and naturally. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and a brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the examiner's question and reduce hesitation and filler words. Also correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and finish within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I rode it to my friend’s house almost every day. Because the roads were quiet in my neighborhood, I felt safe practicing tricks and improving my balance.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Yes, bikes are popular), then give specific reasons and use linking words (because, for example, moreover). Correct grammar (use plural/singular and articles) and reduce fillers. Mention concrete examples (students, commuters, electric bikes) and briefly explain the impact or trend. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many students and parents use them to travel to school and local markets. Moreover, in recent years electric bikes have become more common, which makes cycling easier for longer distances and encourages more people to choose bikes over cars.

× I think bikes quite popular in my country because a lot of student and perhaps a lot of uh, mom using bike from daily activity for uh, to go to school.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country because a lot of students and perhaps many mothers use bikes for daily activities, for example to go to school.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and pluralization (students, mothers) and missing verb 'are' after 'bikes' (subject-verb agreement). 'A lot of student' should be 'a lot of students' (plural noun). 'A lot of uh, mom' should be 'many mothers' or 'a lot of mothers' (plural + correct noun). 'Using bike from daily activity for uh, to go to school' is ungrammatical: change to 'use bikes for daily activities, for example to go to school.' Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs agree in number (use 'are' with plural 'bikes'), pluralize countable nouns when referring to more than one, and use simple present 'use' for habitual actions.

× And honestly, right now there is an innovation like uh, electrical.

✓ And honestly, right now there is an innovation, like electric bikes.

Error: 'electrical' is an adjective that needs a noun; here the intended noun is 'bikes' or 'bike'. Also article/word choice: 'an innovation like electric bikes' or 'an innovation, such as electric bikes.' Suggestion: use the noun 'bikes' after the adjective 'electric' and include a comma for clarity. Use 'electric' (adjective) + noun 'bikes' rather than 'electrical' alone.