Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and give a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct grammar (e.g., article use and tense) and avoid filler words like “like.” Aim for 2–3 sentences and include a linking word if adding details.

예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven, and I learned to ride it in the park near my house.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then provide two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “for instance”). Use more formal vocabulary (avoid slang like “wanna” and fillers like “like”) and keep sentences concise.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles to run short errands or commute to work, especially in crowded cities.

× I had once when I was like 7.

✓ I had one when I was about seven.

The student used 'had once' which is unnatural in this context; 'once' suggests 'at one time' but not specifically owning a bike. Use 'one' to mean 'a bike' and 'about' instead of 'like' for approximate age. Also spell out numbers under ten in formal speech: 'seven.' Suggestion: say 'I had one when I was about seven.'

× Yeah, because you can use it for daily, like if you have errands or you just wanna like go somewhere, you can use a bike.

✓ Yes, because you can use a bike for daily tasks; for example, if you have errands or you just want to go somewhere, you can use a bike.

Problems include pronoun reference and informal words: 'use it for daily' is unclear — 'it' does not clearly refer to 'a bike', and 'for daily' is not standard; use 'for daily tasks' or 'for daily use.' 'Wanna' and repetition of 'like' are informal and unsuitable here. Replace 'it' with 'a bike' and 'wanna' with 'want to.' Also restructure sentence for clarity and parallelism. Suggestion: 'Yes, because you can use a bike for daily tasks; for example, if you have errands or you just want to go somewhere, you can use a bike.'