Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g., Yes or No). Use correct past tense and sentence structure, and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details (when, who gave it, how you used it) and link them with simple connectors like “when” or “because.” Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was in elementary school. My mother bought it for me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend. Because it was my first bike, I felt very proud and practiced riding with my friends until I became confident.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and by adding one specific example or brief comparison. Begin with a direct opinion, then use a linking word (“because” is fine) and give a concrete reason or example (e.g., types of public transport, climate or traffic). Keep responses concise and natural.

예시: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because we have an extensive public transport system, including buses and subways. For example, many people prefer taking the subway to avoid traffic and because bike lanes are limited in most cities.

× I bow when I was on elementary school, my mother and my mother bought me on birthday.

✓ I lived in elementary school when I was a child, and my mother bought me a bike for my birthday.

The original sentence has multiple structural and word-choice problems that fit 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26). 'I bow' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'I lived' or 'When I was in elementary school'. 'when I was on elementary school' uses wrong preposition and order; correct form is 'when I was in elementary school' or 'when I was a child'. The phrase 'my mother and my mother' repeats and should be a single subject 'my mother'. 'bought me on birthday' uses incorrect preposition and missing article; correct is 'bought me a bike for my birthday'. Suggestion: break into two clauses with a conjunction, use 'when I was in elementary school' or 'when I was a child', remove repetition, and use 'bought me a bike for my birthday'.

× I think it's not so popular in my country because we have a lot of public transportation system, so many people choose to use it.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because we have a lot of public transportation, so many people choose to use it.

This sentence has tense and subject-verb issues that fall under 'Present tense issue' (ID 6). 'I think it's not so popular' is awkward because 'it' unclear — use plural 'bikes' and negate the opinion: 'I don't think bikes are very popular'. 'a lot of public transportation system' is uncountable/incorrect article use; use 'a lot of public transportation' or 'a large public transportation system'. The correction keeps present-tense opinion and fixes noun phrases. Suggestion: use 'I don't think' for negative opinions and treat 'public transportation' as an uncountable noun or say 'a good public transportation system' if singular.