Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Améliorez la précision grammaticale et la clarté. Corrigez les erreurs de temps (utilisez le passé pour parler d'enfance), les mots mal prononcés ou mal écrits (« buy » → « bike ») et simplifiez les phrases longues. Utilisez une structure claire : phrase principale au passé, puis 1–2 détails spécifiques avec des mots de liaison (par exemple "so" ou "because"). Évitez les hésitations et les redondances (« a bit far further »).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I shared it with my brother, but I often used it myself to get to school and to go to the park with friends. It was very useful because it made long walks much shorter, so I could save time and play more.

제안: Clarifiez vos idées et utilisez un vocabulaire précis. Évitez les hésitations et les formulations confuses ; structurez la réponse : opinion claire + raison(s) + un exemple bref. Corrigez le vocabulaire (« buy » → « bike ») et la grammaire (usage de « if you are below 18 »). Utilisez des connecteurs simples comme "because" ou "however" pour la cohérence.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many teenagers use them because public transport can be expensive or unreliable, so a bike is a cheap and convenient way to get around. For example, many students cycle to school every day.

× Yes, actually I have a buy that I have to share with my brother, but yeah, I still can use it on the bike is very useful because I can use it whenever I go to school or when I visit the park to play with friends. And it also uh helped me a lot because umm, the distance is seem a bit far further when used more.

✓ Yes, actually I had a bike that I had to share with my brother, but I could still use it. The bike was very useful because I could ride it whenever I went to school or visited the park to play with friends. It also helped me a lot, because the distance seemed a bit far when I walked.

Problems identified: incorrect verb forms and tenses, wrong word choice 'buy' vs 'bike', awkward sentence structure and subject-verb agreement. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood (had, could, went, visited, helped, seemed). Replace 'buy' with 'bike'. Split the long run-on sentence into shorter sentences for clarity. Use 'seemed' (past simple) rather than 'is seem' and remove 'further' which is redundant with 'a bit far'. Suggestions: use consistent past tense for past events, choose correct nouns, and break long sentences into simpler clauses.

× MMM yes I think that is kind of popular because umm if in my country I don't know about the rules and others but if you below 18 you only can use bike for to move because or the public transportation. But the buy is way more convenient so most of us will have ones at home.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular. I am not sure about the exact rules, but if you are under 18 you can only use a bike or public transportation to get around. Bikes are more convenient, so most families have one at home.

Problems identified: incorrect pronouns and verb forms ('if you below 18' should be 'if you are under 18'), wrong word choice 'buy' vs 'bike', incorrect modal and word order ('you only can' -> 'you can only'), plural/singular issues ('bike' vs 'bicycles' and 'ones' -> 'one' or 'bikes'), and sentence structure. Use present simple for general facts (are, can, are) and correct phrasing 'get around' for movement. Suggestions: use 'are under 18', place 'only' after auxiliary verb, use plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally, and replace 'buy' with 'bike'.