Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatically accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and word order (e.g., “my mother bought me a bike”). Avoid hesitations and irrelevant words. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes. I had my first bike when I was eight because my mother bought it for me. I used it to ride to the park and on short hikes, so it became very important to me and helped me stay active.

제안: Answer directly, then give a clear reason with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “however”). Use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “popular,” “electric bikes”). Provide one concrete example or comparison. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Not really. I think bicycles are less popular in big cities because most people prefer driving cars or riding electric scooters. For example, many urban commuters choose cars for convenience, so traditional bikes are not used as much.

× Well, yeah, when I was 8 years old, my mother buy my buy a bike to me.

✓ Well, yeah, when I was 8 years old, my mother bought me a bike.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Buy' is present; use the past form 'bought'. Also the phrase 'buy a bike to me' is incorrect word order; use the indirect object 'bought me a bike'. Improve by using the past simple for completed actions and proper object order: 'my mother bought me a bike.'

× It's my first bike.

✓ It was my first bike.

The speaker is recounting a past experience, so the linking verb should be past tense 'was' rather than present 'is'. Use past tense consistently in narratives: 'It was my first bike.'

× So it's very important for me because I hiking use it and I feel very hmm.

✓ So it was very important to me because I used it for hiking and I felt very happy.

Multiple issues: narrative past requires past tense verbs 'was', 'used', 'felt'. Preposition 'for' is used with purpose: 'used it for hiking'. 'I hiking use it' is incorrect word order; correct is 'I used it for hiking'. Also 'feel very hmm' is unclear; replaced with 'felt very happy' to fit context. Maintain past tense throughout the story.

× No, I'm saying notes because in modern city people's more likely used to drive a car.

✓ No, I'm saying no, because in modern cities people are more likely to drive cars.

This sentence mixes tenses and has several errors: 'saying notes' is incorrect—likely meant 'saying no'. 'In modern city' needs plural 'cities'. 'People's more likely used to drive a car' mixes passive/tense; correct is 'people are more likely to drive cars' using present simple for general facts and 'more likely' with base verb. Use plural 'cars' for generalization.

× So I think our electronic bike.

✓ So I think electric bikes are common.

The original is a fragment lacking a verb and has awkward wording. Use a complete clause with subject and verb: 'electric bikes are common' or 'we have many electric bikes'. Also 'electronic bike' is better expressed as 'electric bike' and use plural for general statements.

× So I think bike it doesn't popular in my in my country, yeah.

✓ So I think bikes aren't very popular in my country.

Incorrect word order 'bike it doesn't popular' and double 'in my'. Use subject-verb agreement and correct negation: 'bikes aren't very popular'. Use plural 'bikes' for general statements and 'aren't' with adjective 'popular'.