Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct past tense. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”). Then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “but” / “however”) and avoid repetition. Correct grammar (past tense, articles, and singular/plural) and concise phrasing will improve clarity.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I always wanted one and used to watch other kids riding near my house. Now I can afford a bike, but I find that modern models feel very different from what I imagined.

제안: Give a clear main sentence and support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “affordable,” “commute,” “convenient”) and avoid repeating the same phrase. Combine related points into one or two concise sentences and use correct articles and verb forms.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable than cars and are convenient for commuting. For example, many people use bikes to get to work or to run quick errands, especially in crowded cities where parking is difficult.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was running but my dream was to buy buy bike. Now I can buy bike but but as I checked it was very different vibe scenario.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my dream was to buy a bike. Now I can buy a bike, but when I looked it was a very different situation.

The original mixes present simple ('don't have') with past time expression ('when I was running'), which is incorrect. Use past simple 'didn't have' for a past state. Also 'when I was running' seems wrong; context implies childhood, so use 'when I was a child' or omit. Repetition 'buy buy' and duplicated 'but but' are errors; remove duplicates. 'Buy bike' is missing the article 'a'. 'As I checked' is awkward; use 'when I looked' or 'when I checked' and 'vibe scenario' is informal and unclear — replace with 'very different situation'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past for past events), use articles with singular countable nouns, and avoid duplicated words.

× Yes, I think people want to buy a bike rather than car because car is very costly.

✓ Yes, I think people want to buy a bike rather than a car because a car is very costly.

When comparing singular countable nouns, each noun needs an article: 'a bike' and 'a car'. The original omitted articles before 'car' and used 'rather than car' which is ungrammatical. Add 'a' before 'car' and before the second mention for parallel structure.

× Then buy people.

✓ Then people buy bikes.

The original word order is incorrect and unclear. English typically follows subject-verb-object order. Reordering to 'people buy bikes' clarifies meaning. Context indicates 'then' connects sequence, so 'Then people buy bikes.' works.

× People also want to go to job and the bike.

✓ People also want to go to work by bike.

'Go to job' is unidiomatic; use 'go to work'. 'And the bike' is incorrect preposition and article use; use 'by bike' to express means of transportation. Rearranged sentence for natural English: subject + verb + infinitive + prepositional phrase.

× People don't want to walk and go to the shop.

✓ People don't want to walk to the shop.

The phrase 'walk and go to the shop' is redundant and awkward. Use 'walk to the shop' to express going to the shop on foot. Keep the negative auxiliary 'don't want to' and the infinitive 'to walk'.

× People want to buy a bike.

✓ People want to buy bikes.

In general statements about people as a group, using the plural 'bikes' is more natural than repeating 'a bike'. Alternatively, 'a bike' is acceptable if referring to an individual desire. Here, plural improves naturalness. Ensure consistency in pluralization when speaking about general preferences.