Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and direct with an appropriate topic sentence and specific detail (age and purpose). To improve: make the response slightly more natural and concise by combining ideas with a linking phrase, and add one more brief specific detail (e.g., how you felt or a memory) to enrich the answer without exceeding five sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was about ten, and I used it to ride to school for two years. It was a small blue bicycle with a basket, and I enjoyed feeling independent riding with my friends in the mornings.

제안: Your answer addresses the question and gives contrast between past and present, but it is disorganized, repetitive, and ends abruptly. To improve: start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, use linking words (however, although, because) to structure reasons, give one or two specific examples or reasons (e.g., traffic, phones, public transport), avoid repetition, and finish with a brief concluding remark. Keep within five sentences.

예시: I think bikes were much more popular in the past, but they are less common now. Although many people used to cycle for fun and transport, nowadays factors like increased car ownership and smartphones mean children prefer other activities. For example, kids often choose scooters or spend time on devices instead of asking for bikes. As a result, cycling is less of a daily habit than it used to be.

× Yes, I had one when I was around 10 years and I used it to go to school for two years.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was around 10 years old and I used it to go to school for two years.

Missing word 'old' after an age is incorrect in English; you should say '10 years old'. The rest of the sentence uses past tense correctly. Suggestion: use 'years old' after an age (e.g. 'around 10 years old').

× Bikes used to be very popular, but nowadays they are not.

✓ Bikes used to be very popular, but nowadays they are not as popular.

The clause 'they are not' is incomplete and sounds unnatural. Add a comparative phrase such as 'as popular' to complete the thought. Tense 'used to' correctly indicates past habit; keep present 'are' for current state. Suggestion: use 'not as popular' or 'not so popular' to compare past and present.

× In the past we would go out racing with our bikes, we would go anywhere with bikes, but not.

✓ In the past we would go out racing with our bikes and go anywhere on our bikes, but not anymore.

Sentence fragment and awkward ending 'but not.' is incomplete. Also 'go anywhere with bikes' is better as 'go anywhere on our bikes.' Use 'but not anymore' to contrast past habits with the present. Suggestion: join clauses with 'and' and finish the contrast clearly.

× Children nowadays don't even want to get a bike on on their birthdays.

✓ Children nowadays don't even want to get a bike on their birthdays.

There is a duplicated word 'on on'. Remove the extra 'on'. The negative present tense 'don't even want' is appropriate for current habits. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and ensure preposition placement 'on their birthdays.'

× But when we grew up, we.

✓ But when we grew up, we stopped riding them as often.

The original is an incomplete sentence and lacks a verb and object. To express contrast about habits changing after growing up, provide a complete clause such as 'we stopped riding them as often.' Suggestion: always include a main verb and object to complete the thought.