Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence, avoid tense errors and filler words, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Keep responses natural and concise (up to 5 sentences).

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child and I loved riding it. I often rode around the neighborhood after school to get exercise and to play with my friends. Riding my bike helped me stay active and made my afternoons more fun.

제안: Start with a clear, grammatical topic sentence, reduce repetition and fillers, and link supporting reasons coherently using linking words (for example, 'first' and 'second'). Give specific examples or brief comparisons to strengthen your answer.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among children and students. First, they provide a cheap and healthy way for kids to get exercise and socialize with friends. Second, because traffic is often heavy in cities, many people use bikes to save time and avoid congestion.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes I did.

The question asks about the past: 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' Use past tense. 'Do' is present tense and does not match the time reference. Suggestion: use past tense auxiliary 'did' for short answers to past questions.

× I liked, uh, riding a bike so much it was one of my goods.

✓ I liked riding a bike so much; it was one of my favorite things.

The speaker refers to a past preference, so 'liked' is correct, but 'goods' is incorrect word choice and count/usage. Replace with 'one of my favorite things' to express a past habitual enjoyment. Also add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× Exercise after school.

✓ I used to exercise/ride after school.

This fragment lacks a finite verb and subject; it is not a complete sentence. In context the speaker means they rode/exercised after school regularly. Use 'I used to' or 'I would' or 'I exercised' to form a complete past-tense sentence.

× Yes, it is, It is very populous, uh, especially amongst young children.

✓ Yes, they are. Bicycles are very popular, especially among children.

The question asks if bikes (plural) are popular. Using 'it is' treats 'bikes' as singular; subject-verb agreement requires 'they are' or rephrase to 'bicycles are'. Also 'populous' means densely populated; the correct adjective for 'well-liked' is 'popular'. 'Among' is preferred to 'amongst' in modern usage.

× First of all, it's good for kids to have some exercise and hang out with your friends.

✓ First of all, it's good for kids to get some exercise and hang out with their friends.

The sentence shifts from a general statement about 'kids' to the second person 'your friends', causing a pronoun reference mismatch. Use 'their' to keep pronouns consistent with 'kids'. Also 'get some exercise' is a more natural collocation.

× And secondly, because in our, in my country, uh, the traffic's pretty traffic is very bad.

✓ And secondly, in my country the traffic is very bad.

This sentence is repetitive ('the traffic's pretty traffic is') and has unnecessary fillers. Removing redundancy yields a grammatically correct clause. 'Because' is unnecessary when giving a second reason introduced by 'secondly'.

× So riding a bike actually save a lot of time for the young people to.

✓ So riding a bike actually saves young people a lot of time.

Subject-verb agreement: with 'riding a bike' as a singular gerund subject, the verb should be 'saves'. Word order improved by placing 'young people' without 'the' for natural phrasing and removing the extraneous trailing 'to'.