Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and precise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid casual interjections like “Hey” and repetition (e.g., “special bike, a beautiful bike”). Also keep answers concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Focus on specifics such as when you got it, who gave it to you, or what made it special.

예시: Yes, I did. I got a bright red bicycle for my eighth birthday from my parents, and I loved it because it had a comfortable seat and a bell. As a result, I spent every afternoon riding with my friends around the neighborhood.

제안: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague or incorrect grammar (e.g., “each children's can have a bike”). Don’t repeat phrases or ask rhetorically. Keep sentences grammatical and concise. Provide one or two concrete reasons or examples showing popularity (e.g., bike lanes, cultural habits, affordability).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many cities have dedicated bike lanes and families often buy bicycles for children. For example, when I was growing up, most children rode to school or to parks, which shows how common biking is.

× Hey, yes, I had a special bike, a beautiful bike.

✓ Yes, I had a special bike, a beautiful one.

The original sentence begins with an informal interjection 'Hey,' which is unnecessary in this context; removing it creates a more natural past-tense answer. The past tense 'had' is correct, but repeating 'bike' is redundant. Replace the second 'bike' with 'one' for concision and natural phrasing. Suggestion: Omit informal fillers in formal tests and avoid repeating nouns; use 'one' as a substitute.

× Actually, each children's can have a bike at home.

✓ Actually, each child can have a bike at home.

'Children' is the plural form; 'each' must be followed by a singular noun. The phrase 'each children's' is incorrect. Use 'each child' (singular) with 'each' to indicate every individual. Also 'can have a bike at home' is acceptable for ability or possibility. Suggestion: Use 'each child' when referring to individuals in a group.

× When I was a child, I remember my childhood.

✓ When I was a child, I remember many things from my childhood.

The original sentence is redundant: 'When I was a child' and 'I remember my childhood' repeat the same idea, making the sentence awkward. Clarify by specifying what you remember or merge into a single clear statement. Keep tense consistent: 'When I was a child' (past) with 'I remember' (present) can be acceptable to indicate present memory, but clarity improves by specifying 'I remember many things from my childhood.' Suggestion: Avoid repetition; either say 'When I was a child, I...' (followed by a past action) or 'I remember my childhood' (followed by specifics).

× It's regarding to right?

✓ It's regarding that, right? OR That is correct, right?

The phrase 'regarding to' is incorrect; 'regarding' does not take the preposition 'to.' Common alternatives: 'regarding that' (formal) or more naturally 'That's right, isn't it?' or 'Isn't that right?' For a short conversational tag use 'right?' or 'isn't it?'. Suggestion: Use 'regarding' with a noun phrase (e.g., 'regarding the rules') or replace with 'that's right' when seeking confirmation.