Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Nhận xét chính: Câu trả lời hiện tại khó hiểu, ngữ pháp sai nhiều, ý không rõ ràng và có nhiều thông tin không liên quan (ví dụ nói về “write” và tốc độ). Để cải thiện, hãy: 1) Trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ: “Yes, I did.”); 2) Thêm 1–2 câu bổ sung cụ thể về loại xe, tuổi bắt đầu và lý do (dùng linking words như “because” hoặc “so”); 3) Tránh ý lạc đề và các cấu trúc điều kiện không cần thiết; 4) Sử dụng cấu trúc thì và đại từ đúng (ví dụ: “when I was a child”, “I was a child”); 5) Giữ tổng số câu không quá 5 và ngôn ngữ tự nhiên. Cụ thể: (a) Nói rõ bạn có xe đạp hay xe máy, (b) nêu tuổi bắt đầu và (c) một lí do ngắn gọn hoặc kỉ niệm.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle when I was about six years old because my parents wanted me to be active. I learned to ride it in our neighborhood park, and I remember feeling proud the first time I rode without help. So it became my favorite way to spend free time as a child.

제안: Nhận xét chính: Câu trả lời rời rạc, nhiều ngắt quãng và sai cấu trúc ngữ pháp khiến ý không rõ. Để cải thiện, hãy: 1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: “Yes, bikes are very popular in Vietnam.”); 2) Cung cấp 2–3 chi tiết cụ thể: tỉ lệ sử dụng, lý do (giá rẻ, tiện lợi), và một ví dụ ngắn; 3) Dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, therefore, for example); 4) Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp: “motorbikes”, “common”, “affordable”, “convenient”; 5) Giữ câu ngắn và mạch lạc. Cụ thể: nêu tại sao người dân dùng xe máy, khi nào/ai thường dùng và một ví dụ thực tế.

예시: Yes, motorbikes are extremely popular in Vietnam because they are affordable and convenient for getting through busy streets. For example, many families own at least one motorbike, and students often use them to commute to school. As a result, traffic is usually full of motorbikes during rush hour.

× I think if everyone were children, they will already have a bike or maybe they just have a outside activity for them to gain their physical health.

✓ I think if everyone were children, they would already have a bike, or maybe they would just have an outdoor activity to improve their physical health.

Conditional sentence uses second conditional (if + past subjunctive), so the result clause should use 'would' rather than 'will'. 'a outside activity' is incorrect article and adjective order; use 'an outdoor activity'. 'for them to gain their physical health' is unnatural — use 'to improve their physical health'. Suggestion: Use 'would' for hypothetical present/future results and correct article and adjective placement.

× And I enjoy it because I am person who write, who like to write something with the high speed.

✓ And I enjoy it because I am a person who writes, who likes to write quickly.

Missing article 'a' before 'person'. Verbs describing habits require third person singular forms 'writes' and 'likes'. 'with the high speed' is awkward; use adverb 'quickly' or 'at high speed'. Suggestion: Add the article 'a', use third person singular verb forms, and use adverbs for manner.

× So it just was the first step for me to know how to ride motorcycle.

✓ So it was just the first step for me to learn how to ride a motorcycle.

'to know how to ride motorcycle' is ungrammatical; use 'learn how to ride a motorcycle'. Article 'a' is needed before 'motorcycle'. Word order 'it was just the first step' is more natural than 'it just was'. Suggestion: Use 'learn' for acquiring a skill, include the indefinite article, and prefer natural word order.

× Uh, you know, Vietnamese is kind of country that's you more of, uh, the transportation with to, uh, will to will solve the bike will are the common one for them.

✓ Uh, you know, Vietnam is the kind of country where bikes are a very common form of transportation.

Use country name 'Vietnam' not adjective 'Vietnamese'. The original has many structural errors; correct subject-verb agreement 'bikes are' for plural, and use 'form of transportation' for clarity. Suggestion: Use the proper noun 'Vietnam', make the noun plural when referring to bikes in general, and phrase 'form of transportation'.

× And this would have the people to know how to ride motorcycle or another bike when they crawl off and they will get a lesson and by.

✓ And most people learn how to ride motorcycles or other bikes when they are children; they often take lessons.

Original sentence is incoherent and uses incorrect verbs and forms. Use 'learn' for acquiring skill (simple present for general truth), plural 'motorcycles' and 'other bikes', correct phrase 'when they are children' instead of 'when they crawl off', and 'take lessons' instead of 'get a lesson and by'. Suggestion: Use simple present for general facts, correct noun plurality, and replace unclear phrases with standard expressions.