Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant and gives some personal detail, but it is a little long and has grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, correct verb forms, and linking words to make it coherent. Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repeating information.

예시: Yes, I did. It was a small pink bicycle that I used a lot as a child. For example, I rode it every afternoon to a nearby supermarket where I often met a friend, which was one of my favorite routines.

제안: Your answer addresses the question and gives a reason, but contains hesitations and some awkward phrasing. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, using linking words (for example, because/therefore), and adding a specific example or contrast. Correct minor grammar (e.g., 'we live in a small city' → 'we live in a small city, so').

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people live in small cities where distances are short. For instance, in my town most people cycle to the market or to school, so bicycles are a convenient and common choice.

× Yes, growing up I had a bike and it was a pink bike and I brought it every day to a small supermarket where I hang out most of the time there with my friend.

✓ Yes, growing up I had a pink bike and I brought it every day to a small supermarket where I hung out most of the time with my friend.

Issues: (1) Incorrect present-tense 'hang out' used in a past narrative — this is a Present tense issue (ID 6) and Past tense issue (ID 5). Use past tense 'hung out' to match 'had' and 'brought'. (2) Redundant wording 'a bike and it was a pink bike' — streamline to 'a pink bike'. (3) Extra word 'there' is unnecessary. Suggestions: keep tense consistent by using past forms for actions in childhood, remove redundancy and unnecessary words to make the sentence concise.'

× Yes, I do think they are popular in our country, uh, where we live in a small city, often we don't need cars to go where we want.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in our country. We live in a small city, so often we don't need cars to go where we want.

Issues: (1) Awkward pronoun 'they' could be more specific 'bikes' — Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12). (2) Comma splice and run-on sentence — Sentence structure errors (ID 26). (3) Unclear connector 'where we live in a small city' should be its own clause and use 'so' to show result. Suggestions: replace vague pronoun with the noun, split into two sentences for clarity, and use an appropriate connector like 'so' to show cause and effect.'

× So, uh, most of the time we use bikes to go there.

✓ So, most of the time we used bikes to get around.

Issues: (1) Present tense 'use' conflicts with earlier past context — Present tense issue (ID 6) and Past tense issue (ID 5). Maintain past tense 'used'. (2) Vague adverb 'there' is unclear; 'get around' is a clearer phrase. Suggestions: keep tense consistent with previous statements about typical behavior in that city and use clearer verbs or phrases for movement.'