Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be grammatically accurate, concise, and logically structured. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child.”). Then give one or two supporting details using correct tense and linking words (e.g., “However, my parents bought me a small bicycle, and my older brother helped me learn to ride.”). Avoid filler words, pronunciation mistakes, and incorrect vocabulary (e.g., “bite” → “bike”; “bra” → “brother” or remove if redundant). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. However, my parents bought me a small bicycle, and my older brother helped me learn to ride it in the park. I remember practicing every afternoon until I felt confident.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific, well-linked reasons and examples. Use correct collocations and grammar (e.g., “people use them to commute to work,” “they are inexpensive,” “many people cannot afford a car”). Use linking words like “because,” “for example,” and “also,” and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–4 sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and run errands. They are affordable and economical, which is important since not everyone can buy a car. For example, many office workers and students prefer cycling for short trips because it is fast and low-cost.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child, but uh yeah I have a cycle that my mother and father had a bite for me.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my parents bought a bicycle for me.

The original mixes present simple 'don't have' with past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'didn't have'. 'Mother and father' is better as 'my parents'. 'Had a bite for me' is incorrect vocabulary; likely intended 'bought a bike for me' and 'bicycle' is the standard noun. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent with past time and use correct lexical items.

× I just love learn how to ride a cycle with my bra helper brother.

✓ I just loved learning how to ride a bicycle with my brave helpful brother.

After 'love' in a past context use past 'loved'. When referring to an activity, use the -ing form 'learning'. 'Cycle' is better as 'bicycle'. The phrase 'bra helper brother' is unclear; likely meant 'brave, helpful brother' or 'brother helped me'. Suggestion: use 'learning' after verbs like 'love' and choose correct adjectives or a clear verb phrase like 'my brother helped me'.

× Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country because many people have take it when they are going office while they are going some party.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many people take them when they go to the office or to parties.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'have take' and mixes verb forms. Use simple present 'take' for habitual actions. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'bikes'. Use 'go to the office' and 'go to parties' for correct preposition and pluralization. Suggestion: use simple present for regular habits and ensure correct verb forms and prepositions.

× It is very helpful and it is also in the low budget.

✓ They are very useful and also low-cost.

'It is' incorrectly refers to bikes (plural); use plural 'they'. 'Helpful' is acceptable but 'useful' fits better for objects. 'In the low budget' is incorrect phrase; use 'low-cost' or 'inexpensive'. Suggestion: ensure subject number agrees and use appropriate adjective phrases for cost.

× Also many people can't afford car to car so that's why this is so popular in our country.

✓ Also, many people can't afford cars, so that's why bicycles are so popular in our country.

The phrase 'afford car to car' is ungrammatical; should be 'afford cars'. Use plural 'cars' to indicate general ability to buy cars. Insert comma before 'so' for clarity. Use 'bicycles' as the subject to be clear. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns and clear conjunction structure to show cause and effect.