Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, fluency and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Correct past-tense verbs and word choice (e.g., 'loved', 'rode'). Remove filler words and avoid repetition. Use a linking phrase if adding a second detail (e.g., 'also' or 'and').

예시: Yes. I had my first bike when I was about eight years old; my grandfather bought it for me. It was shiny blue and black, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. Also, I used to practice balancing and learned to ride without training wheels within a few weeks.

제안: Provide a direct, clear opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid hesitations ('uh') and unclear phrases ('near with some rotations'). Use linking phrases (e.g., 'because', 'for example') and finish the thought. Use vocabulary appropriate to the context (e.g., 'commuting', 'short trips', 'cities', 'rural areas').

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short journeys. For example, many people cycle to work or to the market in cities, and students often use bikes to get to school. Additionally, some cities have bike lanes which encourage cycling.

× I was about 8 years old, my grandpa bought me my first bike.

✓ I was about 8 years old when my grandpa bought me my first bike.

Run-on/sequence: the sentence combines two clauses without a conjunction or relative word. Use 'when' to link the time clause to the main clause and maintain past tense consistency. Suggestion: use 'when' or split into two sentences: 'I was about 8 years old. My grandpa bought me my first bike.'

× It was shiny blue and black.

✓ It was shiny, blue, and black.

List of adjectives: coordinate adjectives describing the bike should be separated by commas and include 'and' before the final item. Also 'shiny' is an adjective modifying color; punctuation improves clarity. Suggestion: use commas in lists of three or more adjectives and include 'and' before the last adjective.

× I really love it at that time but and I usually write it every.

✓ I really loved it at that time, and I usually rode it every day.

Tense mismatch and word choice: 'at that time' requires past tense 'loved' not present 'love'. 'But and' is redundant; use a single conjunction like 'and'. 'Write' is incorrect verb; should be 'ride'. Sentence also misses an object for frequency: 'every' needs a noun such as 'day'. Suggestion: use past tense for past events, choose correct verb 'ride', remove redundant conjunctions, and include the time period (for example 'every day').

× Uh yes, in our country there are many roads and some people always ride bike when they are near with some rotations.

✓ Uh yes, in our country there are many roads, and some people always ride bikes when they travel short distances.

Several issues: 'there are many roads' is acceptable but 'ride bike' requires plural 'bikes' or 'ride a bike'; use plural for general statement. 'when they are near with some rotations' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely meant 'for short distances' or 'when they are nearby'—'rotations' is wrong word. Suggestion: use 'ride bikes' for general actions and replace unclear phrase with 'when they travel short distances' or 'for short trips.'

× Uh, they are most frequently used by.

✓ Uh, they are most frequently used by commuters.

Incomplete sentence and missing object: 'used by' requires an agent; the sentence ends abruptly. Add the agent such as 'commuters' or 'people' to complete the passive construction. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'they are' matches plural subject. Suggestion: complete the sentence with the group who most frequently use bikes, for example 'commuters' or 'students.'