Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar, and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and avoid unclear words. Provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say what kind of bike it was, who gave it, and how you learned to ride with brief reasons or feelings.

예시: Yes. I had a small red bicycle that my mother bought me when I was seven. At first I struggled to keep my balance, so my older brother held the seat while I practiced; after a few days I could ride alone and felt very proud.

제안: Make your point clearly with correct grammar and specific reasons. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect word choices.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in Thailand because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bikes to go to the market or school, and bike lanes in some cities make cycling safer.

× Yeah, I have a binary shoe, uh, my mom's Bosch for me and I try to practice to draw by and yeah, it's so difficult to me when I try first.

✓ Yeah, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My mom bought it for me and I tried to practice riding it, and it was very difficult for me at first.

Multiple pronoun and verb form errors: 'I have' should be past 'I had' to match the past time reference; 'binary shoe' is incorrect vocabulary and should be 'bicycle'; 'my mom's Bosch for me' likely intended 'my mom bought it for me' (verb and pronoun correction); 'I try to practice to draw by' should be 'I tried to practice riding it' (gerund and correct verb choice); 'it's so difficult to me when I try first' should be 'it was very difficult for me at first' (past tense and correct preposition). Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for childhood events, use correct pronouns for objects ('it'), use correct verbs ('bought', 'tried'), and use natural expressions ('at first', 'riding').

× Yeah, yeah, I think it's popular in Thailand because of it's too easily to drive and not appreciate.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in Thailand because they are easy to ride and affordable.

Errors: 'it's popular' is okay but 'bikes are' better to match plural subject; 'because of it's too easily to drive' mixes forms and has incorrect pronoun and adverb choice — should be 'they are easy to ride'; 'not appreciate' is incorrect word choice for affordability — use 'affordable' or 'inexpensive'. Suggestion: use plural subject agreement with plural noun, choose correct adjective/adverb forms ('easy' + to-verb or 'easy to ride'), and use precise vocabulary ('affordable').

× Everyone can be bored in the house and it's easy to find.

✓ People who are bored at home can easily find bikes to ride.

Original sentence is unclear and structurally incorrect: 'Everyone can be bored in the house' is grammatical but unnatural; 'it's easy to find' lacks an object — easy to find what? Rewriting clarifies meaning: 'People who are bored at home can easily find bikes to ride.' Suggestion: specify the object and use natural collocations ('bored at home', 'easily find').