Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details, use linking words, avoid filler sounds (umm, uh) and repetition, and correct minor errors. Mention a concrete memory or reason to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was about seven, and I used to ride it around the neighbourhood park every afternoon. For example, I remember learning to balance on the small hill near the playground, which made me feel very proud. However, I don’t own that bike anymore.

제안: Answer directly, use clearer vocabulary and correct grammar (singular/plural, word choice). Provide one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid fillers. Mention specific facts (e.g. bike-share schemes, traffic, cost) to strengthen the response.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For instance, many cities have bike-share stations that allow people to rent bicycles easily, so commuting by bike is often faster than driving in heavy traffic. Also, cycling is cheaper than taking a taxi or subway, which makes it a common choice for short trips.

× Umm yes umm, I did have a bike when I was a child and I remember riding around in the park and it was really fun and interesting to ride the bike to enjoy the breeze umm on my face.

✓ Umm yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I remember riding around in the park; it was really fun and enjoyable to feel the breeze on my face.

The student used 'did have' which is grammatically correct for emphasis but unnecessary in a simple past statement; using the simple past 'had' is more natural. 'Interesting to ride the bike to enjoy the breeze on my face' is wordy and slightly awkward. Replace with 'it was really fun and enjoyable to feel the breeze on my face' for clarity and natural collocation. Also use a semicolon or shorter sentences to avoid a run-on sentence. Suggestion: Use simple past for statements about past facts (I had), simplify phrasing, and break long sentences into clearer parts.

× And it's sad.

✓ It is sad.

Starting a short declarative sentence with 'And' is informal and can be considered a sentence fragment connector. For spoken responses, 'It's sad' is acceptable, but for clarity and formality remove the conjunction. Also expand contraction if formality is desired. Suggestion: Avoid beginning short standalone sentences with conjunctions; use full sentence 'It is sad.'

× It's sad because I no longer have a bi bike right now.

✓ It is sad because I no longer have a bike now.

Mixing present perfect or simple present ideas with 'right now' and 'no longer' is awkward. 'No longer have' is present tense and appropriate, but 'right now' is redundant with 'no longer'; use 'now' if needed. Also 'bi bike' is a typo; correct to 'bike.' Suggestion: Use 'I no longer have a bike' or 'I don't have a bike now.' Remove redundant words and correct typos.

× Oh yeah, definitely. It is popular because we have this umm, rental bike stations that everyone can use their, umm, easy car to rent the bike and just ride around in the cities.

✓ Oh yeah, definitely. They are popular because we have rental bike stations that everyone can use to rent bikes and ride around the city.

The pronoun 'It' does not agree with the plural noun 'bikes' or 'rental bike stations.' Use 'They are popular.' 'Rental bike stations' is plural so 'this' is incorrect; use 'we have rental bike stations.' 'Everyone can use their easy car to rent the bike' is unclear and ungrammatical: likely intended 'use an app' or 'use a card' or 'use them to rent bikes.' Replace with 'everyone can use them to rent bikes.' Also 'in the cities' is overly general; 'around the city' is more natural. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns and verbs agree in number; clarify unclear noun phrases and use plural forms consistently.

× So it's easy to get everywhere, umm, besides from taking the subway.

✓ So it's easy to get everywhere instead of taking the subway.

The phrase 'besides from' is incorrect. Use 'instead of' to indicate an alternative, or 'besides' without 'from' to mean 'in addition to.' Here the intended meaning is alternative, so 'instead of taking the subway' is correct. Suggestion: Use appropriate prepositions: 'instead of' for alternatives, 'besides' for additions.

× So yeah, I would say it's pretty, uh, popular.

✓ So yeah, I would say they are pretty popular.

The pronoun 'it' refers back to 'bikes,' which is plural; therefore use 'they are' rather than 'it is.' Also 'would say' is a polite modal but acceptable; keep it if you want to sound tentative. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to noun antecedent (bikes -> they).