Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and naturally; avoid repeating the examiner's question. Provide a clear topic sentence (yes/no) then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Be specific about when, where or how often you rode a bike. Keep to at most 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day, which helped me become more independent. Also, I often went on weekend rides with my friends, and we sometimes entered small local races.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and follow with coherent, specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, moreover, in addition). Avoid unclear phrases and incomplete clauses. Mention concrete examples (commuting, sport events, night-riding groups) and keep sentences concise and grammatical.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, children often ride to school and adults join cycling clubs for weekend training. Moreover, there are organized night-ride events in several cities that attract dozens of participants.

× Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because you will.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because you will often see them.

The phrase 'you will' is incomplete and uses future auxiliary without main verb; context requires present simple to state a general truth. Use 'you will often see them' for general observation or better: 'you can often see them' or simple present 'you often see them'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general facts (you often see them) or 'can/will' with a clear main verb ('you can often see them' or 'you will often see them').

× You can always see kids riding them around with their friends and even it is a sport which is played by many people and there is this concept of night riding which you can find at many UMM.

✓ You can always see kids riding them around with their friends, and cycling is also a sport practiced by many people; there is even a concept of night riding at many universities.

The original sentence is a run-on with awkward connectors and unclear noun 'UMM'. Errors include inappropriate conjunction use and unclear reference. Break into clearer clauses, replace 'even it is a sport which is played by many people' with 'cycling is also a sport practiced by many people', and clarify 'UMM' to 'universities' if intended. Use parallel structure and appropriate relative clauses. Suggestion: Divide into shorter sentences, use 'and' or semicolons correctly, and replace vague acronyms with full nouns.