Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 brief supporting details using linking words. Be natural and specific (mention age, who it belonged to, how often you rode it, or a memory). Keep to at most five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven; it was a red bicycle my parents bought me for my birthday. I rode it to visit friends and practice in the park almost every day, which helped me become confident on the road.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then explain with specific reasons or examples and use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Avoid vague or awkward phrasing like “too popular.” Be concise and natural, within five sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, in cities there are dedicated bike lanes and affordable shared-bike schemes, so cycling has become a common and convenient option for daily travel.

× Bikes are too popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

The original sentence uses 'too' which implies an excessive or undesirable degree (e.g., 'too hot to work'), but the student likely intended to express a high degree of popularity. Replace 'too' with 'very' to convey that bikes are widely used without implying a negative consequence. Suggestion: use 'very popular' or 'extremely popular' when you mean a high positive degree of something.