Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give concise, chronological details with correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid irrelevant words (e.g., “bag”) and incorrect time references (you said “when I was child around 2 years ago” which is confusing). Use linking words like “then” or “after that” to show sequence. Keep to 2–4 sentences, correct tense and articles, and use the verb “ride” or “have” for bikes.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I owned it from about age six to eight and I used it every day to ride around my neighborhood. Then my family moved to a city where traffic made cycling difficult, so I stopped riding regularly.

제안: Answer directly and use clear vocabulary: say whether bikes are popular and give specific reasons and examples. Avoid unclear words (“Cyclone” instead of “cycling/bikes”) and unfinished phrases. Use linking words (for example, “because” or “also”) and give 2–3 concrete reasons (transport, exercise, environment). Keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

예시: Yes, cycling is very popular in my country, especially among young people. Many use bikes for short commutes because it is cheaper and faster in congested areas, and others cycle for exercise and leisure on weekends. For example, in my city there are several bike-sharing schemes and dedicated cycle lanes that encourage people to ride.

× Oh actually when I was child around 2 years ago I had a bag and kept it for around 2 years and after that I moved to another city where it is very difficult to cycle, so I forbid cycle anymore.

✓ Oh actually, when I was a child I had a bike and kept it for around two years; after that I moved to another city where it was very difficult to cycle, so I stopped cycling.

Multiple errors: missing article before 'child' (use 'a child') and wrong noun 'bag' instead of 'bike' (likely intended), inconsistent time expression 'around 2 years ago' conflicts with 'when I was a child' so simplified to 'when I was a child' and used 'kept it for around two years' -> acceptable but clarified. 'Forbid cycle anymore' is incorrect verb choice and structure; use 'stopped cycling' to indicate cessation. Tense consistency: past actions use past tense 'was', 'had', 'kept', 'moved', 'was', 'stopped'. Suggestion: keep singular/plural and articles correct, choose appropriate verbs (stop instead of forbid), and ensure time expressions are coherent.

× I do think Cyclone is very popular in my country, especially in the younger generation.

✓ I do think cycling is very popular in my country, especially among the younger generation.

Word choice error: 'Cyclone' (a storm) is incorrect; intended word is 'cycling' (the activity). Also use 'among' with 'the younger generation' rather than 'in'. Suggestion: check vocabulary and collocations: 'cycling is popular among young people.'

× And it is a tendency to bike, to cycle, not only for the transformation, but it's also a kind of sports and it can do, it is a kind of.

✓ There is a trend to bike, not only for transportation, but also for sport and recreation.

Awkward phrasing and several errors: 'it is a tendency to bike' is better expressed as 'there is a trend to bike' or 'people tend to cycle.' 'Transformation' is the wrong word; correct is 'transportation.' 'A kind of sports' should be 'a sport' or 'sports' without 'a kind of.' 'It can do, it is a kind of' is incomplete and unclear; clarified to 'sport and recreation.' Suggestion: use fixed expressions like 'a trend to' or 'people tend to', choose correct nouns ('transportation', 'sport'), and avoid unfinished fragments.