Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a good topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make the response slightly more concise (max 4–5 sentences), add a linking word to connect ideas smoothly, and include a specific detail (e.g., age, type of bike, or a brief example of a memorable ride) to enrich content. Also vary vocabulary a bit (use 'rode' or 'went cycling') to avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school every day from the age of nine, and on weekends I would cycle around the neighborhood with friends because it was a fun way to explore and get fresh air. For example, once we discovered a small park nearby and spent the afternoon there.

제안: The answer addresses the question but is repetitive and slightly unclear. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence about overall popularity, then give two specific reasons (e.g., transport for children, leisure and exercise for adults). Use linking words (for example, moreover) and clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'commute' instead of 'go to school' repeated). Keep it concise and avoid filler phrases like 'you know'.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children commute to school by bicycle because it's cheap and convenient, and moreover adults often cycle for leisure or exercise at weekends.

× 'Yes, especially for the kids as they are using this one to go to school sometimes, you know, for the people who love school for a ride, sometimes it's just like a hobby.'

✓ 'Yes, especially for kids, as they sometimes use them to go to school. For people who enjoy riding for fun, it is sometimes just a hobby.'

'Issues: incorrect continuous form "are using" where simple present "use" is appropriate for habitual actions; incorrect singular demonstrative "this one" for plural noun "bikes"; awkward phrasing "love school for a ride." Suggestions: use simple present for habits (they sometimes use them), match number of demonstrative to noun (them for bikes), and rephrase to a clear collocation (enjoy riding or enjoy riding for fun).'

× 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I cycled to school every day and on weekends I would ride around the neighborhood with my friends because it was fun to explore and get some fresh air.'

✓ 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I cycled to school every day, and on weekends I would ride around the neighborhood with my friends because it was fun to explore and get some fresh air.'

'Issue: missing comma before coordinating conjunction "and" joining independent clauses. Suggestion: add a comma before "and" to separate two independent clauses for clearer sentence structure.'