Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific supporting details and avoid unclear or incorrect phrases. Correct grammar (e.g., “my parents forced me to live without supplements” is unclear and ungrammatical) and reduce hesitations. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “When I was six, my parents bought me a bike. However, I was not allowed to use it freely because…”). Keep answers under five concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was six. However, they also set strict rules about where and when I could ride, so I often felt frustrated. Despite that, I quickly learned to ride well and enjoyed cycling with friends on weekends.

제안: Improve fluency, grammar and specificity: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because” / “for example” / “moreover”). Fix grammar (remove extra articles and repetitions) and use precise vocabulary (commute, short distances, affordable). Limit to under five sentences and avoid fillers like “uh.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many high school students ride to school every day, and adults often use bicycles for short errands in town. Moreover, cycling is encouraged in some cities because it helps avoid traffic and saves money.

× My parents bought me when I was, uh, six years old and I still remember, uh, my parents forced to, forced to me to live without supplements.

✓ My parents bought me a bike when I was six years old, and I still remember my parents forcing me to live without snacks.

The sentence contains a tense-appropriate past action (parents bought) but the phrase 'forced to, forced to me to live' is ungrammatical. Use the past participle or a gerund construction after 'remember' for continuous recollection: 'I still remember my parents forcing me...'. 'Forced to me' is incorrect word order; the correct object is 'me' after the verb 'forcing'. Also 'supplements' is likely the wrong word for small food items; 'snacks' or 'treats' fits the context. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas to make the sentence fluent. Suggestions: use 'forcing me' for the recollection, include the object 'a bike' to clarify what was bought, and replace 'supplements' with 'snacks'.

× Yes, cycling is quite a popular in in my country because many people use bicycle to commute.

✓ Yes, cycling is quite popular in my country because many people use bicycles to commute.

The phrase 'quite a popular' wrongly inserts the indefinite article 'a' before the adjective 'popular' when no noun follows. Use 'quite popular' or 'quite a popular activity'. 'In in' is a repetition error. 'Use bicycle' lacks plural agreement and an article; when speaking generally, use the plural 'bicycles' or the gerund 'use a bicycle'. Also 'commute' as a verb is correct here. Remove duplicate words and fix noun number. Suggestions: choose 'quite popular' or 'quite a popular activity', delete repeated 'in', and use 'bicycles' for general plural reference.

× For example, high school students often like to school since it is cheap and convenient for short distance and also uh when they are going to near place it is also useful.

✓ For example, high school students often like to go to school since it is cheap and convenient for short distances, and it is also useful when they are going to nearby places.

Several preposition and phrase errors: 'like to school' is missing the verb 'go' and should be 'like to go to school'. 'For short distance' needs plural or an article: 'for short distances' or 'for a short distance'. 'Going to near place' is incorrect word order and preposition; use 'going to nearby places'. Also 'it is also useful' should clearly refer to cycling; keep sentences concise and remove filler words. Use plural nouns for general statements. Suggestions: include the verb 'go', fix countability ('short distances'), replace 'near place' with 'nearby places', and maintain consistent subject reference.