Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "when I was" twice) and correct word choice (use "addicted to" or better "very eager to learn"). Also fix verb forms and articles ("I still practiced" or "I kept practicing").

예시: Yes. My mother bought me a bike when I was ten. I was very eager to learn, so I practiced every day; even after I fell and hurt my knee, I kept practicing until I felt confident riding on my own.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and repetitions. Complete your thought ("a tool for transport"), and give a brief example or comparison. Use varied vocabulary like "common", "widely used", "rural", "urban", and linking words such as "because" and "for example".

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines because they are an affordable and convenient means of transport. For example, in rural areas people often use bikes to go to the market, while in cities many commuters use them for short trips to avoid traffic.

× Yes, I remember my mom bought a bike for me when I was a when I was 10 years old.

✓ Yes, I remember my mom bought a bike for me when I was 10 years old.

The original sentence repeats 'when I was' which is a redundancy and disrupts past tense clarity. Remove the extra phrase so the past tense statement is concise and grammatically correct. Suggestion: say 'when I was 10 years old.'

× I think because I'm addicted to it, I'm addicted in learning the bike.

✓ I think because I was addicted to it, I was eager to learn to ride the bike.

The phrase 'addicted in learning the bike' is incorrect: 'addicted to' takes a noun or verb+ing, but 'learning the bike' is awkward. Also the context refers to childhood (past), so use past tense 'was'. Use 'learn to ride the bike' or 'learn to ride' instead of 'learning the bike'. Suggested phrasing: 'I was addicted to it; I was eager to learn to ride the bike.'

× Even when I got an injury because of it, I still practice.

✓ Even when I got an injury because of it, I still practiced.

The sentence describes past events, so the main verb should be in past tense. 'Practice' (present) is inconsistent with 'got' (past). Change 'practice' to the past form 'practiced' to maintain tense consistency. Alternatively, 'I still kept practicing' is also acceptable.

× Yes, very popular in the Philippines because even in rural even in rural areas, aside from urbanized areas, we tend to use bikes umm as a tool to.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines because even in rural areas, as well as in urbanized areas, we tend to use bikes as a means of transportation.

The original sentence has repetition ('even in rural even in rural'), missing main verb for the reply ('Yes, very popular' lacks 'are'), filler words ('umm') and an incomplete phrase ('as a tool to'). Fix by supplying the verb 'are', removing repetition and fillers, and completing the idea with 'as a means of transportation' to make the sentence clear and grammatical.