Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, correcting grammar (tense and articles), and adding one specific supporting detail. Use linking words minimally to improve coherence. Aim for 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition (e.g., "used to" repeated).

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small bicycle when I was four after I kept asking because my older cousin had one. It was bright red and helped me learn balance and confidence while riding around our neighborhood.

제안: Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (articles, word order) and avoid redundancy ("mode of transport" repeated). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "widely used", "affordable"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are widely used because they are affordable for many middle-class families, and they are convenient for navigating crowded city streets. As a result, motorcycles and scooters are a common sight during rush hours.

× So I used to ask my parents for one and they gifted me bike when I was 4 year old.

✓ So I used to ask my parents for one and they gifted me a bike when I was 4 years old.

The sentence has past events so past tense is appropriate but contains article and plural/time expression errors. Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'bike' and make 'year' plural as 'years' when referring to age. Suggestion: use 'they gifted me a bike when I was four years old.'

× Yeah, in my opinion as I've seen bikes are very popular in my country as they are a very major mode of transport on daily basis.

✓ Yeah, in my opinion, from what I've seen, bikes are very popular in my country because they are a major mode of transport on a daily basis.

Problems: awkward tense and connector use and article usage. 'As I've seen' is better phrased 'from what I've seen.' 'A very major' is redundant; use 'a major.' Add article 'a' before 'daily basis.' Also add commas for clarity. Maintain present perfect 'I've seen' to indicate experience up to now.

× Because most of the people in my country are from middle class sector and they are not able to afford cars.

✓ Most people in my country are from the middle class and they cannot afford cars.

Beginning a sentence with 'Because' creates a sentence fragment; combine with previous sentence or remove 'Because.' Use 'most people' instead of 'most of the people' (both are possible but 'most people' is more natural). Use definite article 'the' with 'middle class.' Use 'cannot' (or 'can't') and avoid 'able to' for conciseness. Keep present simple for general truth.

× So bikes are usually used as a mode of transportation.

✓ So bikes are usually used as a mode of transportation.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'used' is correct passive past participle forming a present simple passive construction. No correction needed. Suggestion: could be shortened to 'So people usually use bikes for transportation.' for active voice and conciseness.

× I remember I used to have a bike as a child because my elder cousin used to have it.

✓ I remember I used to have a bike as a child because my older cousin had one.

'Elder' is typically used within family context before nouns like 'sister' or 'brother' but 'older' is more natural for 'cousin.' Also avoid repeating 'used to' twice; simplify by using 'had' for the second clause. Use 'one' to avoid repetition. Maintain past habitual meaning.