Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also vary your verbs and combine short sentences to sound more natural.

예시: Yes, I had a black-and-red bike that my dad bought me when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around our subdivision, and my dad and cousins helped teach me, which made learning fast and fun.

제안: Structure your response with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid small grammar errors and awkward phrases (e.g., “have taken up on biking” and redundant words).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars, so they rely on bicycles for daily transport. In addition, cycling is seen as healthy, so many people ride for exercise and leisure as well.

× I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is grammatically possible but unnecessary for a simple past declarative sentence; it creates an emphatic or contrastive meaning. The simple past 'had' is more natural for a straightforward statement about the past.

× It was black and red and my dad bought it for me.

✓ It was black and red, and my dad bought it for me.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to separate two independent clauses. This is a punctuation issue rather than a verb form error; however, as punctuation improves clarity, add the comma.

× I used to ride it around the R subdivision when I was younger.

✓ I used to ride it around the R subdivision when I was younger.

No grammatical preposition error identified; sentence is correct. (Kept for completeness.)

× I used to do it daily.

✓ I used to ride it daily.

The verb 'do' is vague here; to match the previous mention of riding a bike, use the specific verb 'ride'. 'Used to' already marks past habitual action, so keep past form.

× I think my dad taught me how to ride it and I learned to ride it with my cousins when I was young.

✓ I think my dad taught me how to ride it, and I learned to ride with my cousins when I was young.

Sentence is mostly correct in tense. Improve clarity by adding a comma before 'and' and removing the repeated 'it' in the second clause to avoid redundancy: 'learned to ride' implies the bike.

× Bikes are quite popular in my country because a lot of people don't really own cars, so bikes became a popular way of getting around.

✓ Bikes are quite popular in my country because a lot of people don't really own cars, so bikes are a popular way of getting around.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence starts in present tense ('are quite popular') then shifts to past tense 'became'. To maintain consistency about a current general fact, use present 'are' rather than past 'became'.

× It's also good for your health so a lot of people have taken up on biking as a hobby to as well as a transportation.

✓ It's also good for your health, so a lot of people have taken up biking as a hobby as well as using it for transportation.

'Take up' is a phrasal verb that takes a direct object without 'on' ('taken up biking'). Also the phrase 'to as well as a transportation' is ungrammatical and redundant. Rephrase to 'as a hobby as well as using it for transportation' to make the parallel structure clear. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.