Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (umm, uh), and keep to one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “instead” and “also”) and give a brief specific detail about the rickshaw (what it looked like or how you used it).

예시: I didn't have a bicycle as a child; instead, my father bought me a small rickshaw that I rode around the neighborhood. Also, my friends and I often raced each other for fun on weekends, which helped me learn balance and coordination.

제안: Use correct tense and more natural phrasing. Begin with a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and linking words (for example, “because” or “for”). Avoid grammatical errors (e.g., “men and women both use them”). Add a concrete example about who uses bikes and for what purposes.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and commuting. For example, students often cycle to school and market vendors use bikes to transport goods in towns.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, umm, but my father brought me a small rickshaw and I played with my friends every day.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my father bought me a small rickshaw and I played with my friends every day.

The speaker used 'brought me' incorrectly; 'brought' is used when someone carries something to the place where the speaker is. In this context, the intended meaning is that the father purchased or gave the rickshaw, so 'bought me' or 'gave me' is correct. Keep past tense consistent: 'didn't have', 'bought', 'played'. Suggestion: Use 'bought me' if the father purchased it, or 'gave me' if he presented it as a gift.

× Uh, sometimes we used to race each other for fun.

✓ Sometimes we used to race each other for fun.

This sentence is fine but the filler 'Uh' is unnecessary. 'Used to' correctly expresses a repeated past habit. Suggestion: Remove fillers when speaking or writing to make the sentence cleaner.

× I thought bikes are popular in our country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in our country.

The original mixes past ('I thought') with present general truth ('are popular'). For current opinions use present simple: 'I think' + 'are popular'. If the speaker meant past belief, keep past tense for the complement: 'I thought bikes were popular.' Suggestion: Match the main verb tense with the time reference of the opinion.

× Men's and women both are used to it.

✓ Men and women both are used to them.

Several issues: 'Men's' is the possessive form and is incorrect here; use 'Men'. Also 'both are used to it' is awkward because 'bikes' plural requires 'them' as the pronoun. Better: 'Men and women are both used to them' or more naturally 'Both men and women are used to bikes.' Suggestion: Use plural noun forms and matching plural pronouns.

× For day-to-day life they used it.

✓ For day-to-day life they use them.

Tense and pronoun errors: 'used' implies past; the question asks about current popularity so present simple 'use' is appropriate. 'It' is singular but refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'them'. More natural: 'People use them for day-to-day life.' Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and match pronoun number to antecedent.