Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, accurate in tense, avoid repetition, and limit length to 3–4 clear sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), give one or two specific supporting details (when you learned, what you liked about riding), use linking words (for example, because, so), and avoid filler phrases and self-corrections.

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. I learned to ride it in kindergarten, so I remember feeling very independent and exploring parks and nearby streets with my friends.

제안: Answer directly, use appropriate linking words, and provide a specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrases and informal contractions like 'cause' and redundant statements. Keep to 2–3 clear sentences and include a concrete detail (e.g., cycling lanes, government campaigns) to support your view.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because of increasing concern about pollution and traffic. For example, many cities have built new cycling lanes and the government runs campaigns encouraging people to commute by bike instead of driving.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and I really love to ride a bike to explore in my neighborhood at that time.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I really loved riding a bike to explore my neighborhood then.

Tense mismatch: 'do have' is present but the timeframe is past ('when I was a child'). Use past tense 'had' for possession and 'loved' for past habit. Use the gerund 'riding' after 'loved' to express habitual action. Also remove unnecessary articles and 'at that time' replaced with 'then' for conciseness.

× And I was a really outgoing children child.

✓ And I was a really outgoing child.

Word choice and number: 'children' is plural while 'child' is singular, causing a conflict. Use the singular noun 'child' to match the singular subject 'I'. Remove the redundant word so the phrase reads 'outgoing child'.

× I mean, and I learned how to ride a bike when I was I guess when I was in kindergarten, but I forgot the specific age.

✓ I mean, I learned how to ride a bike, I guess when I was in kindergarten, but I forgot the exact age.

Redundancy and tense consistency: Remove the repeated 'when I was'. Use 'I guess' set off by commas and 'forgot' is correct past tense. Use 'exact' rather than 'specific' for natural phrasing. Ensure commas to separate the parenthetical 'I guess'.

× Yes, absolutely. It is a really popular thing in my country 'cause we all know we have to focus on reducing the pollution now and everyone is working on that.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Bicycles are very popular in my country because we all know we need to focus on reducing pollution now and everyone is working on that.

Tense and wording: 'It is a really popular thing' is awkward; use plural 'Bicycles are' to refer to bikes generally. 'We have to' is okay but 'we need to' is more natural here; remove the definite article before 'pollution'. Also expand 'cause' to 'because' for formality and clarity.

× So everyone, a lot of people prefer biking than driving actually.

✓ So many people prefer biking to driving, actually.

Preposition error: Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A than B'. Also streamline 'everyone, a lot of people' to 'many people' to avoid redundancy. Place 'actually' at end for natural emphasis.