Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid short fragments and grammatical errors. For example, combine ideas and correct tense and pronoun usage.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bicycle when I was about seven because they wanted me to learn to be independent. I used it regularly to ride to my friends’ houses and to the park, and I enjoyed learning new tricks on it.

제안: Focus on clarity, correct word choice, and logical linking. Start with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and use linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Correct common word errors (buy→bikes, countries→country).

예시: Personally, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because there are many motorcycles and cars on the roads, which makes cycling unsafe. However, some people still cycle for exercise or short trips in quieter neighborhoods.

× Because they want me to.

✓ Because they wanted me to.

The context describes past events (parents bought the bike), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Want' should be changed to 'wanted' to match the past-time reference and maintain consistent tense. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed actions in the past; e.g., 'They wanted me to.'

× Bike since I was young.

✓ I have had a bike since I was young.

The original fragment lacks a main verb and a proper subject, making it grammatically incomplete. 'Since I was young' indicates a period from the past until now, so present perfect ('have had') is appropriate to show continuous possession. Suggestion: Use a complete clause with subject and verb and match tense to the time expression (present perfect with 'since').

× Personally I don't think buy is popular in my countries because there are too many motorcycle on the roads and things it is not suitable for using bicycles.

✓ Personally, I don't think bicycles are popular in my country because there are too many motorcycles on the roads and it is not suitable to use bicycles.

Multiple errors: 'buy' is a wrong word form/pronoun use—should be 'bicycles' (noun). 'My countries' is incorrect; likely singular 'my country'. 'Motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles' to agree with 'too many'. The clause 'things it is not suitable for using bicycles' is ungrammatical and awkward; rephrase to 'it is not suitable to use bicycles.' Also added a comma after 'Personally' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct nouns ('bicycles', 'motorcycles'), correct singular/plural for 'country', and rephrase awkward clauses into clear infinitive or gerund structures (e.g., 'suitable to use bicycles' or 'suitable for using bicycles').