Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, fluent and clearer. Start with a simple topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, correct basic grammar (e.g., "my dad bought it for me"), and give one or two brief supporting details (color, memories, how you used it). Use linking words if adding details.

예시: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a small red bike when I was about eight, and I used to ride it to visit friends and practice tricks in the park. It was my favorite toy because it made me feel independent and confident.

제안: Answer directly and provide specific, coherent reasons with fewer hesitations. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Correct vocabulary (e.g., "cars" not "carats") and mention concrete examples (traffic, lack of bike lanes).

예시: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my city. Because Baku has heavy traffic and very few dedicated bike lanes, most people prefer cars or public transport, so cycling is not common for daily commuting.

× Yeah, I remember I I, however, I had a bike which is called call in red.

✓ Yeah, I remember. However, I had a red bike that I called 'Call'.

This sentence has several structure and clarity problems: repetition ('I I'), awkward phrasing ('which is called call in red'), and punctuation issues. I separated ideas into two clauses, removed the repeated word, and reordered words to place the adjective 'red' before 'bike'. If the student meant the bike's name was 'Call', include the name in quotes or say 'that I called Call'. Use periods or commas to separate ideas clearly.

× Uh, my BA, my dad bought this to me.

✓ Uh, my dad bought it for me.

The original uses incorrect pronoun forms and word order: 'bought this to me' is not correct English. Use the object pronoun 'it' and the correct preposition 'for' with 'bought': 'bought it for me'. Also remove unclear 'my BA' unless it refers to something specific; if so, clarify it.

× Uh, actually I don't think so, You know, uh, umm, I live in Baku and Baku, uh, is uh, I think small city.

✓ Uh, actually I don't think so. You know, I live in Baku, and Baku, I think, is a small city.

Problems include punctuation and missing article before 'small city'. 'Is small city' is incorrect; English requires an article 'a' before singular countable nouns ('a small city'). Also fix run-on phrasing by using a period and commas to separate clauses and remove filler words.

× So there are many uh, carats in our city, uh, not, uh, bike roads.

✓ So there are many cars in our city, not many bike lanes.

'Carats' is a wrong word choice; likely 'cars' was intended. Also 'bike roads' is unnatural; 'bike lanes' or 'cycling lanes' is the correct phrase. Ensure parallel construction: 'many cars' and 'not many bike lanes' or 'few bike lanes'. Use correct vocabulary and word order.