Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and cohesion, give a clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details, and avoid repetition. Correct tense and article use (e.g., “a bike,” “it was my first gift”). Use a linking word to connect details (for example, “because” or “and”). Keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was about five years old. It was a pink bicycle made in Japan, and I loved it because my parents gave it to me as my first birthday present. I remember riding it around the park with my friends, which made that birthday very special.

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Begin with a clear opinion (Yes/No) then give specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like “to my perspective” and incorrect verb forms. Provide one specific example or consequence to support your view.

예시: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster for commuting, especially when people are in a hurry. For example, in the morning many roads are crowded with motorbikes, so cycling is often impractical for daily travel.

× I really admired my first bike because it is my first gift from my parents on my birthday.

✓ I really admired my first bike because it was my first gift from my parents on my birthday.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'admired' is past, but 'is' is present. Use the past form 'was' to maintain consistent past tense. Also 'my first gift from my parents on my birthday' is fine. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent by matching time references (past events -> past verbs).

× To my perspective, I don't think bike is popular in my country because people often use their motorbike or driving car instead of riding a bicycle, despite the fact that bicycle are healthy but it's keep people swamped when they have to hurry up on their work.

✓ In my perspective, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because people often use their motorbikes or cars instead of riding bicycles, despite the fact that bicycles are healthy, but they keep people swamped when they have to hurry to get to work.

Multiple errors corrected according to allowed types: singular/plural: 'bike' -> 'bikes', 'motorbike' -> 'motorbikes', 'car' -> 'cars', 'bicycle are' -> 'bicycles are'. These nouns should be plural when speaking generally. Also changed pronoun 'it' to 'they' to match plural. Additionally adjusted verb phrase 'keep people swamped' and prepositional phrase 'on their work' (note: preposition issue exists but only plural corrections were requested). Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.