Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문에 바로 답한 뒤 구체적이고 자연스러운 세부사항을 더하세요. 불확실한 숫자 표현(예: "13/8")은 피하고, 연령이나 경험을 명확히 말하세요. 또한 어색한 소리(umm)는 줄이고 문장을 2~3문장으로 구성해 보세요. 예: 주제문(있었음/없었음) → 언제/어떻게 타게 되었는지 → 한두 가지 기억 또는 이유.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I got it when I was about eight years old and used to ride it every day after school. One of my favorite memories is racing my friends in the park on weekends.

제안: 명확한 의견을 먼저 말하고, 구체적인 이유나 예시를 연결어를 사용해 제시하세요. 모호한 표현("I'm leaving toll", "bike is called garden")은 피하고 대신 통계나 생활 방식, 장소를 들어 설명하세요. 문장은 2~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for short trips and commuting because they are cheap and convenient, especially in cities with good bike paths. For example, I often see people cycling to work and students riding to school.

× Yes, when I was young. Umm. I played by 13/8.

✓ Yes, when I was young. Umm. I played until I was 13.

The original sentence has unclear structure and an incorrect use of 'by 13/8'. This appears to try to express an age or time but uses an invalid numeric format. Use 'until I was 13' to indicate the duration up to that age. Keep sentences clear and avoid mixing numbers and slashes for ages; state the age in words or digits correctly.

× Yes, umm, I'm leaving toll so. Probably we have probably bike is called garden, so many people using that bike.

✓ Yes, umm, I'm living in a town called Toll, and many people use bicycles there.

The original contains several problems: 'I'm leaving' is incorrect form of 'I'm living' (pronunciation confusion) and 'toll' likely is a place name requiring capitalization and correct wording; 'we have probably bike is called garden' is ungrammatical and unclear — incorrect pronoun/phrase use and word order. 'So many people using that bike' lacks a proper verb form and subject-verb agreement; change to 'many people use bicycles there.' Suggestions: use present continuous 'I'm living' for current residence, capitalize place names, use clear noun phrases ('a town called Toll'), and use simple present 'use' for habitual actions.