Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Start with a topic sentence stating you had a bike, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (appearance, who gave it, when) using past tense and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “A2 wheels” or “the first bike I haven't had.”

예시: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike with small training wheels that my mother gave me for my tenth birthday about ten years ago. It was my first real bike and I rode it every day around the neighborhood.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then offer two specific reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., convenient, affordable, suitable for all ages) and avoid fillers. Provide an example or brief comparison to support your point.

예시: Yes, definitely. Bikes are a popular form of transport because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and workers use bicycles to commute to school or work, and cities often have bike lanes that make cycling safer for people of all ages.

× Of course I have a bike with a pink color and A2 wheels.

✓ Of course I had a bike that was pink and had A2 wheels.

The question asks about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so present tense 'have' is incorrect. Use past tense 'had' and match verb forms for each clause: 'was pink' and 'had A2 wheels'. Also 'a bike with a pink color' is unnatural; 'a bike that was pink' or 'a pink bike' is clearer. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for past-time descriptions and simplify adjective phrases (e.g., 'a pink bike').

× This is a gift from my mother for my birthday.

✓ It was a gift from my mother for my birthday.

The context is past (childhood), so present 'is' is wrong; change to past 'was'. This also corrects article/context mismatch by using the pronoun 'It' to refer back to the bike. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use appropriate pronouns to refer to previously mentioned nouns.

× It's around 10 years ago and this is the first bike I haven't had.

✓ It was about ten years ago, and that was the first bike I had.

The phrase 'It's around 10 years ago' mixes present 'It is' with a past time marker; use past 'It was about ten years ago'. 'This is the first bike I haven't had' is ungrammatical and contradicts itself (negative 'haven't had') — intended meaning is that it was the first bike the student ever had, so use past simple 'that was the first bike I had'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past events and avoid double negatives; express possession simply (I had).

× Yes, definitely.

✓ Yes, definitely.

No grammatical change needed; this interjection is appropriate and matches the present context of answering the examiner's question. No correction provided.

× I'd say that bikes are important and popular transport in my country because it's suitable for umm, many ages such as, uh, adapts and uh, children can uh, approach by.

✓ I'd say that bicycles are an important and popular form of transport in my country because they are suitable for many age groups, such as adults and children, and are easy to use.

Multiple issues limited to types in the provided list: 'transport' needs an article or classification (Article errors/incorrect noun use), 'it's suitable for many ages' is awkward — better 'they are suitable for many age groups' (subject-verb agreement and clearer noun choice). 'adapts' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'adults'. 'children can approach by' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'children can use them' or 'they are easy for children to use'. Suggestion: Use 'bicycles' or 'bikes' consistently, use plural pronoun agreement ('they are'), replace 'ages' with 'age groups', correct word selection ('adults'), and express 'easy to use' clearly.