Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Remove fillers (uh, I, IK).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought me my first bike when I was about eight years old, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood after school.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid hesitations and finish your thought in complete sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, there are dedicated bike lanes along many main roads, and many people use bicycles for short commutes and exercise.

× Yes, I have the bike when I when I was a child, my father bought my first bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my father bought my first bike.

The student uses present tense 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was a child'. This is a tense mismatch. Use past tense 'had' to match the past context; also remove the duplicate phrase 'when I' and join clauses properly with a semicolon or conjunction to improve clarity.

× I was about 8 years old uh after the holiday uh IK I I uh.

✓ I was about eight years old. It was after the holidays, I think.

The original is fragmented and contains filler sounds ('uh', 'IK I I uh'), causing sentence structure problems. Convert numeric '8' to words for speaking and split into clear sentences. Replace filler with 'I think' to express uncertainty; ensure proper punctuation and word order.

× Yes, I think it's popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

The pronoun 'it' is vague here. The question asks about 'bikes', so use plural noun 'bikes' and present tense 'are' to agree with plural subject. This clarifies the subject and ensures subject-verb agreement.

× There, uh, there are some uh, bike roads near the main roads and uh.

✓ There are some bike lanes alongside the main roads.

The original has filler words and awkward phrasing ('bike roads' and repeated 'there'). Use the standard term 'bike lanes' and a concise structure 'There are some bike lanes alongside the main roads' to be natural and grammatically correct.

× Some people.

✓ Some people use bikes for short trips or commuting.

The fragment 'Some people.' lacks a verb and a complete thought. Complete the sentence by adding a predicate that explains what some people do, matching the topic of bike popularity.