Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and structure: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and keep within 3–4 concise sentences. Add one specific detail (e.g., who taught you or a memorable moment) and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I still have it now. My older brother taught me to ride when I was seven, so I learned very quickly. Because I practiced every day, riding became one of my favorite activities and I always felt free and happy.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then provide two specific reasons with clear linking words and finish the thought. Avoid repeating or trailing off and use precise vocabulary (e.g., bike lanes, pedestrians, traffic safety).

예시: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because there are almost no dedicated bike lanes. As a result, cyclists often have to ride on sidewalks or share busy roads with cars, which makes cycling unsafe and inconvenient.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I had it, uh, right now also and I was able to learn how to ride a bike and it was so fun.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I still have it now; I was able to learn how to ride a bike and it was so much fun.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly: 'I had it, uh, right now also' is awkward and incorrect. Use 'I still have it now' to indicate possession continuing to the present. Also 'so fun' is informal and less natural in this context; use 'so much fun' or 'very fun'. Maintain past tense for 'was able to learn' and 'was' for the experience, and present perfect/simple present for continuing possession.

× I don't think the bikes are popular in my country because we don't have special roads for the bikes so they must uh.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because we don't have special roads for bikes, so people must, uh,

Using the definite article 'the' before 'bikes' and 'the bikes' is unnecessary when speaking generally; plural countable nouns used generically should have no article ('bikes'). Also 'special roads for the bikes' should be 'special roads for bikes'. The sentence also ends abruptly; I preserved 'people must, uh,' as a filler but made structure clearer.

× You must ride a bike on the pedestrian streets, and it's not very.

✓ You have to ride a bike on pedestrian streets, and it's not very safe.

The original uses 'You must' and shifts pronouns awkwardly after the examiner's question; 'have to' or 'must' are possible but 'have to' sounds more natural here. 'the pedestrian streets' should be 'pedestrian streets' when speaking generally. The clause 'and it's not very' is incomplete; add 'safe' to complete the meaning. This corrects sentence structure and completes the idea.