Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), correct grammatical errors, and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect the reason.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. In my community girls were generally not allowed to ride bikes, so my parents didn’t buy one for me. As a result, I usually walked to school or took public transport.

제안: Make your answer more organized and specific: give a clear opinion, then two concise reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'to do different household cars'.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For one thing, many men use motorbikes daily because they are affordable and convenient for commuting. Also, bikes are useful for short trips to markets and for small deliveries, which keeps them in wide use.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because in our community, uh, girls are not allowed to have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because in our community girls were not allowed to have bikes.

The sentence mixes past tense context with present-tense 'are not allowed'. Change to past 'were not allowed' to match 'I didn't have' and 'when I was a child'. Also change 'a bike' to plural 'bikes' after 'girls' for natural general statement (or keep singular repeatedly: 'to have a bike' is possible but plural is more natural). Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense and plural where making a general statement about a group in the past.

× Umm, mostly boys and men use bike for different purposes, to go shopping malls, schools and like anywhere they use bike, but I don't have any.

✓ Umm, mostly boys and men used bikes for different purposes, such as going to shopping malls, schools, and other places, but I didn't have one.

Several issues: tense should match past ('used' to match earlier past context). 'Use bike' is ungrammatical; use plural 'bikes' or 'one' appropriately. 'To go shopping malls' needs the gerund form 'going to shopping malls' and preposition 'to'. 'Like anywhere' is informal and unclear; change to 'other places'. Finally, 'I don't have any' should be past 'I didn't have one' to match the narrative. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent, use plural nouns when speaking generally, and use gerunds after 'for' to express purpose.

× Yeah, bikes are pretty much popular in our country.

✓ Yeah, bikes are quite popular in our country.

'Pretty much popular' is nonstandard collocation; use 'quite popular' or 'very popular'. The present tense is acceptable here because it's a general statement about the present. Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('quite popular').

× Mostly men used to have bikes in their childhood and also in their throughout their life.

✓ Mostly men used to have bikes in their childhood and also throughout their lives.

Remove extra 'their'. Use plural 'lives' to match plural 'men'. 'Used to have' is fine for past habitual action; keep past context. Suggestion: Ensure possessive adjectives are not duplicated and match number (lives for plural subjects).

× They use bikes for different to do different household cars and to do their works.

✓ They use bikes to run different household errands and to do their work.

The original sentence has unclear and incorrect phrases: 'for different to do different household cars' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'to run different household errands' which conveys common meaning. 'To do their works' is awkward; use 'to do their work' or 'to get their work done'. Suggestion: Choose clear nouns ('errands') and idiomatic expressions ('do their work'), and keep parallel structure for the two purposes.