Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct tense and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “because” or “and” properly, and keep it to 2–3 sentences. For example, start with “Yes, I did” (past simple) and then explain who gave it and why it was memorable.

예시: Yes, I did. My father gave me a red bicycle for my tenth birthday, and I remember being very excited because it let me ride to school and explore the neighborhood by myself.

제안: Answer directly, use clear grammar and specific reasons or examples. Begin with a concise opinion sentence (“Yes, they are popular”) then give one or two clear reasons with linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and easy to use for short trips. For example, many people ride bikes to markets or to commute short distances in crowded cities.

× Yes, of course I have a bike when I I was a child because that time I was so excited to have a bike and my father gifted me on my birthday.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child because I was very excited to have it and my father gifted it to me on my birthday.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past context 'was a child'; use past tense 'had'. Also remove the repeated 'I'. Use 'it' to refer back to the bike. Use the correct verb pattern 'gifted it to me' (gift someone something or gift something to someone). Improve clarity by replacing 'that time' with no extra phrase and using 'very' instead of 'so' for formality.

× So I have a bike in my childhood.

✓ So I had a bike in my childhood.

The clause 'in my childhood' establishes past time, so the verb must be past 'had' rather than present 'have'. This is a sentence structure/tense consistency issue; keep verb tense consistent with the time expression.

× Yes, of course, it is a convenient transportation mode that used by people who are often live in my country and they mostly prefer to choose bike for a local travel as well as whenever they have a small distance they mostly choose bike for cover.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are a convenient mode of transportation that are used by people who often live in my country, and they mostly prefer to choose bikes for local travel; whenever they need to go a short distance, they usually choose a bike.

Multiple subject-verb and agreement errors: 'it is' should be 'bikes are' to match plural 'bikes'. 'that used by' needs passive 'that are used by'. 'who are often live' should be 'who often live' (remove extra 'are'). 'choose bike' requires plural or article 'choose bikes' or 'choose a bike'. 'a local travel' is incorrect; use 'local travel' or 'local trips'. 'have a small distance' is unnatural; use 'need to go a short distance'. 'mostly' repeated; use 'usually' for variety.