Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is hard to follow and contains many grammar errors and repeated words. Aim to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Keep sentences short (max 5) and use correct tense and articles. For example, say you didn’t have a bike and then explain why (safety, parental rules, lack of facilities).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents didn’t allow it because they thought it was unsafe for young children. In addition, there weren’t many safe places to ride near our home, so they preferred I walk or use public transport.

제안: The idea is clear but the response needs clearer structure, correct grammar, and more specific supporting details. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two concrete reasons with linking words (for example, for work and for deliveries). Avoid repetition and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'delivery riders', 'commuting', 'affordable').

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many people use them to commute to work because they are cheap and convenient. Secondly, delivery services employ thousands of riders who use motorcycles and scooters to deliver food and parcels quickly.

× 'No, I have no bike that I have a child because my parents cannot allow a government also strict a lot of rules to under underage and they also can cannot go to the jail also and a lot of facilities are not available in in the child. So that's why no safety in the.'

✓ 'No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not allow it. The government also has strict rules for minors, and there are not many facilities for children, so it was not safe.'

'The original sentence misuses pronouns and contains unclear references (for example "that I have a child", "they also can cannot"). Replace vague pronouns with clear references: 'it' for the bike, and explicitly mention 'my parents' or 'the government' where needed. Also simplify and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use clear antecedents for pronouns and avoid repeating or contradicting auxiliaries.'

× 'No, I have no bike that I have a child because my parents cannot allow a government also strict a lot of rules to under underage and they also can cannot go to the jail also and a lot of facilities are not available in in the child. So that's why no safety in the.'

✓ 'No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not allow it. The government also had strict rules for minors, and there were not many facilities for children, so it was not safe.'

'The response refers to childhood, which requires past tense. The original uses present tense verbs (have, cannot) incorrectly. Change to simple past (did not have, did not allow, had, were) to match the time frame. Ensure verbs agree with the past context.'

× 'A lot of facilities are not available in in the child.'

✓ 'There were not many facilities available for children.'

'The original uses the preposition "in" incorrectly and repeats it. Use "for" to express that facilities are intended for or available to children. Also change 'the child' to the plural 'children' to match general meaning.'

× 'Yes, bikes are popular in my country because all peoples are going to the worker worker and also give a lot of hard work going to the parkings.'

✓ 'Yes, bicycles are popular in my country because many people use them to get to work, and they are useful for delivery workers who do hard work and need parking.'

'The phrase "all peoples are going to the worker worker" is ungrammatical and has subject-verb and noun form problems. Use 'people' (not 'peoples') and a proper verb phrase 'use them to get to work.' Ensure verbs agree with plural subjects and use correct noun forms like 'parking' or 'parking spaces.' Also avoid repeating words.'

× 'A lot of Zomato like such as online platforms using the bikes to deliver the delivery the products like.'

✓ 'Many online platforms such as Zomato use bikes to deliver products.'

'The original misuses quantifiers and repeats words ("deliver the delivery"). Use 'many' for countable platforms and the concise phrase 'use bikes to deliver products.' Remove redundant words and place quantifiers before the noun they modify.'